Date: May 01 2019 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 1
I absolutely loved this story, it was an amazing read and I really hope to see more in the near future. The pace, detail, and ideas behind each chapter were amazing and very well done. Exploring what ideas Jaden has (mentioned at the end) and see Laura shrink down would be a great read as well (M/f is my favorite). Keep up the great work!
--- Gentle Giantess
Date: April 29 2019 8:20 PM Title: Chapter 5
Did I give you a 9 (4.5 stars) last time? I'm so sorry. It was a mistake. I hope this time it gets a 10.
So you want bit of critique eh? Ok, I'll give you critique. I must warn you, I write professionally, but only technical writing; I'm new at this fiction stuff. Take my words for what it's worth, which may not be much. Just something to consider. Now then ...
The story itself is fine and I think you write masterfully, however, I think the story is moves slowly. It's long on description and narrative but short on dialog. That's okay in this situation, so I don't know how to make it move faster, but I think more dialog would help, and possibly telling it in the third person. But what do I know?
Like Bigdawg K, I'm not really into the violent stuff, but I don't think this was very violent. It teetered on the edge of real violence but you did a good job of walking that fine line. And far be it from me to tell an author to change their story to suit my tastes. if I don't like a story, I don't have to read it. You shouldn't have to change it to satisfy me.
But on the other hand, there's lots of violent (and butt, vore, foot, smell and all sorts of other nasty stuff) here. So it's a refreshing change to find something more gentle. But again, it's your story.
I enjoyed it and hope to read more, seeing Jaden dominate over Laura, but playing with her. Tortoring her not with physical pain but in bringing her to the brink of satisfaction then pulling back. But that's just an idea. Do what you please.
Date: April 21 2019 2:03 PM Title: Chapter 1
Like the story until this chapter, Laura getting pissed her lover for helping her Climax, wonder if he did let her know she was shrinking would he be punished then as well. actuall painful Spanking didn't help the chapter in view at all. If I was to rate the chapter this chapter I would give it a 2.5, however since the other three have been very good and your other work has been excellant, I will give it a pass and hope that we don't revist Laura possibly causing serious harm to her lover (he's got to be all of what 3 feet at most and she at 8 foot is putting effort in to hurting him NOT COOL!)
Agree to disagree. Thank you for the feedback though.
Date: April 14 2019 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 3
I like the premise of someone shrinking just because they WANT to. And being able to take pills to do it, well I can think of all sorts of games that lovers -- and enemies -- coud play. I'll think be going to drug store real soon to get some 'Aspirn' and 'Baby Aspirin' . ;)
I admit that I was taken by surprise in the last chapter when Laura shrunk but she seems to have made up for it now. And now that she's big I can only wonder what punishment she's going to dish out. I'd also like to find out what would happen if the relative sizes were the other way around?
Author's Response: I think those are some pretty insightful questions and observations. Those are things I want readers to be thinking about, so itís gratifying to hear. I wonder if Laura shrinking put some people off? Itís all a chocolate-and-peanut-butter situation for me, but I could see not everyone feeling that way. Just curious, I noticed you rated this one 4.5 stars. Can you think of anything that couldíve been different in the story that wouldíve made you want to rate it a 5?