Date: January 24 2019 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 2 – Flashbacks of the Collar, Part 1
Interesting change of pace from where we were at previously. Seems like Shy is used to being large and in charge, going to be fun to see how she makes the adjustments to come. As a minor suggestion, you may wish to indent your dialogue to make for easier reading for some people. That said, I heartily enjoyed this chapter. Thanks!
Author's Response:
She is indeed! I'll probably just add the rest of the flashback to chapter 2 and continue with new stuff in 3.
That's totally a fair piece of advice, thank you for the feedback. I'll poke around with different styles for a bit, but if I recall correctly last time I tried that style it felt too sparse for my preferences. The last time I tried it was ages ago, though perhaps it's worth another look. Thank you for the reveiw!