Reviewer: Curvograph Signed [Report This]
Date: January 15 2019 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 3: Warming-Up

A good story, but a little bit too fast-paced for my liking. Let me be more specific: the beginning was excellent, but I feel as if you had wanted to move to 'good stuff' too quickly. As a result, some scenes are cut rather abruptly and news announcements come in the most convenient moments to propel the plot (it reminded me of a recently watched 'A Series of Unfortunate Events', but there it highlighted the series' specific narration). Give your characters a little more time, explore their thoughts, emotions and surroundings - all those little things that make the story flow more smoothely and make the world more immersive. 

'A Whole New Perspective' shows tremendous amounts of potential, I can see it becoming one of the gems of this site. As of today though, it is not yet polished.

C

 

Author's Response:

Very much appreciated this is our first attempt at doing a story so we are just trying to have fun with it. That's not to say that we won't come back to this universe and explore it more though in a seperate story. We only had 7 or 8 chapters planned and for this it's only focusing on Amber and Connor's point of view, their relationship with each other, and how they deal with their new lives. We have a new character in the works as of right now so perhaps in the future we can do a side story around her and explore the universe more thoroughly. Again thank u for your comment and we hope you stick with us the whole way  

Reviewer: DollSize Signed [Report This]
Date: January 14 2019 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 3: Warming-Up

Oh Amazing ! So good !

Author's Response:

Thank you !