Reviewer: WTH I Love This Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12 2020 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 6

This is a GREAT story so far!

I personally would LOVE to see more interaction between Ryan and his mom! I would like to maybe see Ryan say something to his mom that hurts her feelings, or just talk about when he hurt her feelings before, and she would reveal how much it hurt her. This would lead to Ryan agreeing to spend more time with her, and he would be more accepting of what she wants to do with him, when she wants to do it. 

This, then, would lead to Mary slowly but surely becoming the head of the household. Maybe Mary, Emily, and Ryan would be watching TV. Emily and Ryan are sitting together as a couple, but then Mary says "Do you think I could hold Ryan for a bit?" To which Ryan would feel like he has to agree, and he gets snatched up in her smothering hands. Maybe Mary would ask her "little man" to rub her feet for her, in front of Emily! And then Mary would absentmindedly begin to play with him: rolling him under and between her soles, squeezing him with her toes. And all the while she's saying totally embarrassing mom things, cooing and "aww"ing at her "baby". 

Maybe she'd ask if Ryan can sleep in her room sometimes, and this would only increase the sexual tension of separation between Ryan and Emily as well as totally emasculate Ryan as his mother cuddles and snuggles him like he's a baby again while his beautiful, sexy girlfriend is in their bedroom by herself. Maybe Emily would start to work longer hours, making it so that Ryan sleeps with his mom more often! 

I don't really want Emily to have any affair with Rick, but IF she did, that would then be the perfect opportunity for Mary to be like "Aww, don't worry, sweetheart! Mommy will take care of her little baby from now on!" 

Sorry, I know that's a lot, but you did ask to see what kinds of things we wanted to see from Mary! In the end though, it's your story, I just hope you are inspired by at least some of my hypothetical paths the story could go down! 

Keep up the good work! 

Reviewer: gtsfan91 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11 2020 3:27 PM Title: Chapter 6

Nice new read, didnt see any mistakes or such.