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Reviewer: ThickBeast Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 27 2024 12:00 PM Title: Graduation

Please, come back to this story. I'm so invested in the Beth, Tom and Ashley dynamic its cute. At least with Beth and Tom, i'd definitely hook up with Beth if I didn’t have a slimy "I have to dominate you at every turn sister'. Riley as a sibling.

Reviewer: locutus17 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21 2020 6:58 AM Title: Graduation

In the immortal words of Hunter S Thompson from Fear and Loathing - "Finish the fucking story man!"

Reviewer: cabalinan Signed [Report This]
Date: December 25 2019 7:48 PM Title: Graduation

Excited to see this story get back again!

Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: November 01 2019 3:19 PM Title: Research and restaurants

Not strictly about your story, but it has to be mentioned here - https://old.reddit.com/r/nottheonion/comments/dq8kx0/you_can_now_eat_fried_chicken_that_tastes_like/



Author's Response:

That sounds interesting. I'd love to go and try some, but I imagine ordering some would be a little awkward haha. It's from an idol group too, hot!

Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: October 01 2019 2:44 PM Title: Interlude - An Exchange of Servitude

Fyi the fine guys at giantesscity have a thread about writer's block etc https://giantesscity.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=87&t=90078



Author's Response:

Thanks! Taking a look now.

I think I'm just about over it (fingers crossed) so going to get back to work. It was an interlude that was tripping me up and if it continues to go slow I'll just skip it and continue on with the main story. It'd be a shame leaving character set-ups in there for no reason, but I'd like to finally finish a proper long-form story. Thanks (not only to you, but everyone cheering me on eager for more chapters) for the continued support. :)

Reviewer: Randomer000 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 25 2019 3:47 PM Title: Interlude - An Exchange of Servitude

Hope all’s well and that the story’s still coming on alright, man, even if it’s a little hard to get the words to come out at times!

Don’t feel the need to rush or anything, just take your time until you’re happy with it, and I’m sure I, and most others on this site, can’t wait to see what you come up with next!

Author's Response:

Whilst blocking on this story I haven't been totally inactive haha, written a couple non-gts stories. I have been poking at the document for this one. We'll see if I can't get a few more chapters done in the next couple of months. :)

Reviewer: footboy28 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 30 2019 9:05 AM Title: Interlude - An Exchange of Servitude

How’s the new chapter coming along? Dying to see what happens next! Regardless take your time because the quality is really great here!

Author's Response:

Slowly. Sorry, man, but struggling to write at the moment. I promise it'll be out as soon as possible. I have the next steps of the story planned out, the issue is writing those steps haha.

Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: August 09 2019 5:54 AM Title: Interlude - An Exchange of Servitude

We are all rooting against that obnoxious writer's block (not just in your case :)

 

As I probably told you a gazillion times, Giantess Michelle has been the #1 thing I wanted to see since the very first chapter, so HURRAH!

 

I must admit, I had no idea she would be so well suited to the role, or that she would be tormenting someone other than Tom, that she could combine cruelty and carefulness like I love so much, AND to see all of the above in a chapter I already liked for other reasons (the dream - I love women driving people mad like that).

 

But most importantly, I never ever thought you would find such a peculiar way to celebrate Vore Day! :D



Author's Response:

Good to know that I'm not suffering alone. :)

I did love writing some giantess Michelle. I'll need to find a way to include her in future chapters. She lacks the naturally cruel side that Riley has, but that doesn't mean she can't turn it on when she needs to! I suppose that her time of punishing Tom, inspired by Riley's earlier actions, has changed her somewhat.

I'm trying to do away with awkward scene transitions at the recommendation of an editor friend of mine, hence the *** multiple times. Whilst I didn't want to over use it, I think the chapter is better paced because of it. The dream sequence was something I wanted to write for a while. I love the idea of a girl with braces and this seemed like the perfect opportunity to put them temporarily on Riley hehe. Plus I really wanted to end the chapter with a call back to the dream.

It was vore day? I had no idea but now I'm even more glad that I had Michelle tease Teddy with a threat to eat him hahaha.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2019 6:39 PM Title: Interlude - An Exchange of Servitude

God I love Riley's crew, I can see where Tom gets his worrys from.



Author's Response:

They're so delightfully terrible, aren't they?

Tom definitely has reason to be worried haha. :)

Reviewer: footboy28 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2019 5:07 PM Title: Interlude - An Exchange of Servitude

Once again you continue to deliver! Great chapter once again. It was great to see a more playful side of Michelle. I have to ask how tall is Teddy? i think it was mentioned in the earlier chapter but i forgot. But I am definetly looking foward to the next chapter!!!



Author's Response:

Teddy is supposed to be 1 foot tall/12 inches. I admit, I have poor consistency when it comes to visualising that particular size into these positions, so it might not be entirely accurate. I have been wanting to use Michelle more and it was nice to get some action with her!

Reviewer: Fantasizechange Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 17 2019 7:42 AM Title: Graduation

This story is so well written. I’m hooked!! Please keep updating

Author's Response:

Thank you very much! I shall keep updating, although sometimes I can be a little slow. :)

Reviewer: MacroGod Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 11 2019 9:25 PM Title: Tom's first date

I can't wait for Tom to actually get shrunken 😈lol



Author's Response:

I'm sure Riley has a particularly evil plan in mind, we'll have to see how it plays out! :)

Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: July 05 2019 2:55 PM Title: Research and restaurants

"intelligible" reminds me of https://www.reddit.com/r/TheSimpsons/comments/1i67pm/inflammable_means_flammable_what_a_country/ :D

 

(you have no idea how much easier it is to write things like this than to put it down what you (dis)liked and why - give it a try :)

 

I almost expected Riley to say something like "so SHE is your secret gf"; a bit surprising that Beth played along. Good job Tom!



Author's Response:

That is genuinely one of my favourite Simpsons jokes!

 

Are you implying that you are holding back? Not sure if I'm misunderstanding, but if you see anything wrong with the story or anything you dislike, fire away! 100% I can deal with it and improve from it. In reposting this story on another site a few issues have popped up to me. Honestly, I mean this, go ahead and criticise as much as you like. In the long run, I'm here to improve and write better stories.

So far, Beth has been a very passive character. I felt that since she is an SCO, I should have her be more involved and react more to what she cares about. I do think Tom did well, let's hope it doesn't come back and bite him in the ass, eh? ;)

 

 

Reviewer: footboy28 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 05 2019 10:41 AM Title: Research and restaurants

Great chapter. I do hope we start to see some shrinking with tom in the next couple of chapters. Regardless still the best story on here!!!



Author's Response:

Not with Tom. Sorry! He will (maybe ;) ) shrink eventually, you'll just have to see! But if he does I promise that I'll try and make the build up worth it. You have no idea how much I appreciate you and your reviews man, thanks for enjoying my story!

Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27 2019 9:49 AM Title: Tour of torture

s/plague/plaque I guess :D



Author's Response:

Oh god, I'm dumb haha. Thanks for pointing out the error, it's fixed :)

Reviewer: footboy28 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 27 2019 5:09 AM Title: Tour of torture

Man you have some imagination for torture and i love it! Keep up the good work!



Author's Response:

Thanks! I intended to show off other torture devices that the Association has, but I didn't want to bog the chapter down with descriptions and so settled on the one. I like the idea of the footsie press, there's a certain playful element to it.

Reviewer: cabalinan Signed [Report This]
Date: June 26 2019 8:50 PM Title: Tour of torture

Made an account just to say this has been a great series so far! Please keep on writing!


Can't wait till Riley gets her hands (or feet) on Tom!



Author's Response:

Oh wow, thank you very much! I'll do my best to keep churning out chapters if people keep enjoying them :)

 

It will be a while, but I hope I can make it worth the wait!

Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07 2019 5:23 AM Title: Interlude - Creative cruelty

Imho the most important thing about this chapter is that Tom,Riley&Michelle need to know about it, one way or another - Riley/Michelle finds out and tells the others, Tom discovers about it and Riley/Michelle ask what he's looking at... so many possibilities!

 

(what I'm currently rooting for is that Michelle asks that if he's ever shrunken he gets some extension time with her, but 1. that's just me, and 2. "currently")



Author's Response:

Ah fuck that's good... Thankfully I haven't wrote that bit yet so I can still include it, if it fits of course :) 

If you like Michelle, I have an upcoming interlude featuring her! Not with Tom, of course. I'll let you guess who hehe.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 06 2019 6:33 PM Title: Interlude - Creative cruelty

There's only one Riley but Naomi seems to enjoy her creative cruelty so she's always welcome.



Author's Response:

Don't you worry AdamX, we'll be returning to Riley soon enough. Happy to know that Naomi tided you over :)

Reviewer: footboy28 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 06 2019 12:26 PM Title: Interlude - Creative cruelty

Oh I just love these interludes! This chapter was one of my favorites! The sexual themes are the best on this site! This is why 5e slow build up is worth it, for chapters like this one! Keep up the good work!

Author's Response:

That's good to hear! At first I was worried that the interludes would be disliked compared to the main narrative, but the response seems great hehe. I'm enjoying expanding on the sexual themes now that story is in full swing, can't wait for you all to see what I have planned!

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