Reviews For MISS Bloom
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Reviewer: Zalrus IX Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 06 2007 3:10 PM Title: MRS BLOOM

Although the all caps turned me off, the indentations are good. keep with that. just slow down. develop. We are not player haters, so keep our advice.

Zalrus9 

Reviewer: not really Signed [Report This]
Date: October 06 2007 12:39 PM Title: MRS BLOOM

Listen U Jackasses this is my first average story cut me some slack and I know bout the caps but don't worry cus In the sequel I'll think about it more so screw haters !!!

Reviewer: RamsusXIII Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: October 06 2007 12:32 PM Title: MRS BLOOM

For starters, you have it all in caps. DO NOT DO THIS FOR THE ENTIRE STORY IT IS NOT CRUISE CONTROL FOR COOL! Second this story seems like a joke, are you really serious? Third, if you are serious, this story is an absolute mess, seems incredibly rushed and has like...no direction at all.

Reviewer: Whittleman Signed [Report This]
Date: October 06 2007 12:30 AM Title: MRS BLOOM

This isn't all that good. The all caps is very distracting, and the dialouge isn't believable. I'm sorry, but this is incredibly sub-par.

Reviewer: DX Machina Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: October 05 2007 11:04 PM Title: MRS BLOOM

STOP SHOUTING AT US.  It's not a good way to get your message across.

You have some ideas that might be good, if developed.  Slow down and develop them.  Also, commas are helpful to the reader.

Reviewer: Survivor Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: October 05 2007 5:34 PM Title: MRS BLOOM

Caps Lock is not your friend.

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