Reviewer: Ask-Giantess-Lover Signed [Report This]
Date: October 24 2018 6:39 AM Title: Characters

Gonna say this first, because I don't want my criticism to sound negative: I really like this story. (or set of stories, more accurately) You certainly have skills in terms of writing, and it's very easy to imagine what you describe. It's a great change of pace from others I have read that use weak or unbelievable (in a bad way) imagery. PLEASE keep up the good work!

My criticism falls with just a couple of things:

• Having the character descriptor page (in my opinion) takes away from the opportunity to meet the characters through your storytelling. This is a bit nitpicky, as most folks read these stories for something... other than... storytelling (lmao) but I was really happy to see you making up for this by being descriptive regardless. Others seem to like it (for example, blackairow's review) so maybe I am just too picky.
• When it comes to the "science"  I don't have a lot of complaints. It makes for a much more believable story in terms of fiction for the character to be denser rather than just magically resilient (magic is how I've handled such things, so good on you for taking this route) but the one thing that bothers me is that the characters weight is said to stay the same. Don't get me wrong, if they're denser than it makes logical sense, but that also means that being so easily picked up and moved is pretty unlikely. A good fix for this would honestly be to just ignore it. Like taking out the line mentioning weight and let suspension of disbelief take its place.

Again, I honestly love the story, I just wanted to use my review as a place for some constructive criticism as well. 10/10 Great work! :)

Author's Response:

Thank you, and the only reason I introduce the characters is to pre establish relationships without wasting time trying to establish connections as I go. Thanks for the support xx

Reviewer: zbh Signed [Report This]
Date: October 20 2018 2:10 AM Title: Characters

I liked it. Hope to see more! Just a suggestion as the other user wrote try to proofread and spellcheck. A couple typos, but I knew what you were saying.