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Reviewer: It Was Me Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 21 2023 9:46 PM Title: Chapter 1

I meant to review this when it was still up with the most recent stories, but now I see that this story was initially written in 2018. Well, in any case, if you're still considering continuing this, I'd like to encourage you to do so.

The fact that most of the story was a dream sequence was a pretty neat, Twilight Zone-like twist to the whole thing that I really enjoyed. Miranda's casualness to the situation gave off an almost eerie vibe when contrasted with the main character's confusion. It also gave the story a good sense of mystery, leaving the reader to guess about what's going on until the end.

That being said, dream Miranda herself was actually pretty endearing. From cutely waving at the main character from the removed ceiling to unknowingly humming through him, she shows off quite a bit of personality in little ways that allow us to connect with her a bit. Also, despite the main character constantly being reminded of how much bigger and more powerful she is than him, Miranda treats him in very much the same way you would expect her to a roommate (well, the licking at the end might not be something EVERY pair of roommates share).

I really enjoyed your descriptive style throughout the dream sequence. I don't really know how to describe it other than that. It was really just enjoyable and not the least bit cumbersome to read.

Now that ending was a bit bleak, which, of course, it was clearly meant to. Still, I would be interested to see which Miranda is more real: dream Miranda or the Miranda that the main character has already decided will likely see him as less of a person the smaller he gets.

I mean, I'm left wondering if that dream is just some hopeless fantasy the main character has or if it's maybe his subconscious trying to remind him that some of the things he loves about Miranda aren't going to change just because he'll be tiny. After all, I find it unlikely that he could only love her body and that the rest of the stuff from the dream (the way she behaved/that aforementioned personality) is stuff he just made up on his own.

Also, the fact that the main character admits that they're BOTH trying to act like things are still normal, to me, shows that Miranda still views him the same. She could easily show annoyance at needing to help him more or take joy in teasing him about being so short, taking pleasure in having newfound power over him. But she doesn't, at least according to the main character.

Who knows, maybe Miranda has been fighting herself to not "make it weird" as well.

Then again, maybe she's got "plans" (ones he won't enjoy) for the main character when he's small, and she doesn't want to scare him off. The beauty of this story is that we really don't know, because we haven't even met the actual character yet.

I personally feel like there's a good story left to tell here. It could be a gentle story (which I would advocate for) or a not-so-gentle one (which I think could be interesting as well).

Anyway, if you do end up picking this back up, I'll certainly read it.



Author's Response:

Hello, It Was Me, thank you very much for your kind words. I do apologize if you felt mislead; I was actually only trying to update the summary for this story, but bumped it up the recent works list accidentally.

As stated, this one scene really came to me in a rush of inspiration, but I never planned anything further. That said, I would quite like to give our nameless protagonist a happy ending. Work in a few more dream scenes (they are too convenient a trope not use) and introduce the real Miranda while at it.

Thanks again.

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