[Report This]Date: August 16 2018 3:28 PM Title: Life Regrets and Afterlife Glories
So sad that this is the final chapter already, at least its longer.
And I don't know why you are horrible, the only thing I can complain about is maybe the missing pizza.
The parts with Allison were also nice. Great to see how Athena uses her to nurture Ben to her will/personality, its both cute and dominating. I'm also wondering if Ben is able to "see" into the normal world, or can only do it using the sandbox. And speaking of that, it seems Athena created quite the ultimate sandbox. Are you sure ther isn't a fourth chapter coming?
At last, thanks for writing and see you next time I hope!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback.
I'll be honest, I don't quite know what you meant by the "missing pizza"
Yeah, I love Allie as a character but I was afraid adding her would subtract attention away from Athena, who I didn't want to neglect.
I didn't let Ben see through to the real world, but rest assured, if Athena wanted him to see Earth again through her own eyes, she would let him.
I don't plan on making a fourth chapter, but like I've said before, it's set up to be kind of an infinite playing field. I could turn the story into a dungeons and dragons type theme with Athena as a huge DM and Ben running around with allies if I felt like it. I just get worn out from typing because I don't focus on anything IRL until I complete whatever story I start.
Thank you for reading my strange short story!