[Report This]Date: December 24 2018 2:28 PM Title: VRcade
I just recently came back to this story after dropping it a few chapters in. I have to admit, I wasn't a big fan of the concept at the start, but I think you've done a really good job at writing this story. I'm a big fan of the main trio. I would hate to see anything break them apart. I would be good with something getting a bit dark, like Jackie having the power go to her head in the VRcade, or maybe one of the giantesses having a momentary lapse in judgement where their sexual fantasies overcome their rational brain and they take something too far with Jackie, but nothing that would fundamentally ruin the relationship between the three of them. I think you've built a good thing there and I would be sad to see it destroyed.
That's also my main cconcern with Alyssa. I don't mind her being in the story, as long as she doesn't become the main focus. There's a cliche in some giantess stories where the main gentle giantess doesn't realize how much of a threat a malicious giantess is to their tiny and keeps trying to get the tiny to be ok with the malicious giantess being around despite the tiny's protests and fear, even when the fear is completely justified. That's the kinda stuff that I dislike. But right now it appears that Marliegh is completely on Jackie's side on this front, and I hope it stays that way.
Author's Response: Thank you for giving the story another chance! I am having a harder time figuring out where to go in this VR world the trio will be spending in without causing some damage to their friendship. I have some ideas in mind but I really want to take my time writing these next few chapters. As for Alyssa's part of the story, she was supposed to be a "wolf in sheep's clothing" but I knew the stereotype you mentioned and how often it's been used so I went with the opposite. She might return in later chapters but in an unknown way, hopefully as a better character and villain to the group, in an unconventional way perhaps.
Date: December 24 2018 12:09 PM Title: VRcade
I've been checking this story out but haven't left a review yet. This is an interesting multi-size world you've created. The shoes converted into public transportation is a clever idea. Jackie and Marleigh's relationship is very sweet.
I have to be honest, I think Jackie is a better person than me. I would probably not be able to forgive Carissa. Even if she's repentant, this is someone who murdered and devoured doozens of people in front of Jackie, many of them her friends and classmates. I would not be able to be around someone who did that. It would be like trying to make friends with a serial killer or terrorist. Even if they reformed, it would be hard not to hate them or get traumatic flashbacks in their presence.
Anyhow, just wanted to express that, as I was a bit uneasy with that part of the story. I'm very interested to see what role reversals or fantasies play out ar the arcade.
Author's Response: I thought about Carissa's and Jackie's relationship for a bit and we might see that Jackie hasn't fully forgiven Carissa, even if she says she has to both girls. In this VR world that she runs now, we'll see all of their fantasies with the different sizes available to them, but primarily Jackie's. We've seen one already with Marleigh and a partial one with Carissa. I defiantly want to expand Jackie's relationship with Carissa after the VR experience is done to have more reason to it.
Date: December 24 2018 10:26 AM Title: VRcade
Excellent chapter! Now that they are in the VR world...can't wait to see how the unlimited size options are explored between these three very different characters! Would love to see Jackie as the giantess or, perhaps Carissa wrests power over the VR world from Jackie and reverts to some of her old ways with a tiny Jackie and Marleigh? Unlimited possibilities!
Author's Response: I really hope to add at least a chapter to each of the girls personal fantasies dealing with their sizes. Even if she'd the one controlling everything, Jackie will still play ball with Marleigh's and Carissa's personal fantasies. A giant Carissa with tiny Jackie and Marleigh? All three the same size destroying a micro city? I agree, there are so many ideas that could be tossed in but not enough time. Hell, just those two ideas sound really interesting to write in. I hope to satisfy the desires of both the characters and the readers as well :)
Date: December 24 2018 8:08 AM Title: VRcade
Youd better get creative.
Author's Response: I will certainly try to :)