[Report This]Date: August 17 2019 12:10 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Awesome finish to a excellent story! Maybe Straight for Ellie's Belly Chapter 3 next? :D
Author's Response: That is definitely on the horizon! Just needs a few tweaks and it should be good. Hope to have the 3rd chapter out very soon if life doesn’t get in the way! Any way, thank you for the kind words, very much appreciate it! :)
Date: March 16 2019 12:07 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
I like this, it has feet and gentle giantess. Also has some evil.
I liked Carissa being in charge and I would like even more to see Carissa being a giantess in the city. Having both girls small. You know, Carissa being evil like her own past. But this time doing it because she know she is in a VR environment.
Also I want to say that I cant walt to see Jackie being a giantess goddess.
Date: November 17 2018 7:52 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Great chapter! I love the relationship development between Carissa and Jackie. I especially love the set up for the role reversal! I think that would be such a fun shift of perspective and opens a new world of storylines! Great work!
[Report This]Date: November 12 2018 6:33 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Fantastic story so far! This is my kind of story, very small girl and lots of foot content, plus it's mostly gentle. Really looking forward to future chapters, I like the world you've built for these characters, it all feels somewhat real as that's probably how society would treat micros if they were real. Keep it up!
Date: November 09 2018 3:13 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
The shopping trip was fun, and I'm enjoying seeing the relationship get farther along, as well as the other two slowly trying to make things better between them after the past
Date: November 07 2018 4:21 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
This continues to be one of the best stories on here. Truly a unique plot concept coupled with great writing. This may be too divergent for your vision, but I would love to see future size variance between Jackie, Marleigh, and Carissa such as Marleigh shrinks to Jackie's size and Carissa has fun with both of them or Jackie somehow becomes a giant compared to Marleigh and Carissa in a role reversal. This would be predicated on the discovery of invention of a size changing device but would make for a fun and interesting dynamic. Perhaps a tiny Marleigh would gain an appreciation for feet just like Jackie or a giant Jackie would return the favor (playfully) for her school alternatively a giant Carissa could prove a playful antagonist. I know it's a long shot, but the reason I even suggest is that you are very good at capturing people's emotional responses to each other, and having such size changes would definitely involve significant changes to how the characters relate to each other. Anyway, excellent work, and I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: A role reversal in this story is something I've personally thought of adding. It might be a stretch in the story's world but it could happen. After the next chapter I have planned, I don't have anything else so it could be an idea to think about. Also, thank you for the kind words, it really makes me want to keep writing this story!
[Report This]Date: October 24 2018 10:10 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Really enjoyed it once again. I look forward to seeing interactions with all 3 of them.
Date: October 09 2018 3:07 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Really like this kind of setting and the characters involved in this story, and also where the plot is going.
The whole bus thing also reminds me of a smiliar idea I had so long ago that I forgot about it. I really appreciate you writing down this concept into a story, so thank you :)
I'll be checking this story for updates. In the mean time I whish you good work.
Date: September 19 2018 8:05 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Just popped in to say that I'm looking forward to reading the new chapter. And it looks like the story isn't over yet? That's great news! When I can take a break from writing my own stories, this will be the first story I read. I think I'll re-read it from the very beginning.
Author's Response: I look forward to see how you think the story is evolving! Hope your stories go well, maybe I’ll take a look over there and see how they’re doing ;)
Date: September 18 2018 10:04 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Very excited to see where this goes. Hopefully Jackie and Marleigh can progress beyond foot rubs to actual footplay and foot exploration. Really enjoying the gentle, playful interaction. Great work!
Date: September 18 2018 3:11 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Fantastic addition. Would have loved to see more of the foot massage. Hopefully next time. Curious to see where it goes as well
[Report This]Date: August 24 2018 11:52 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Well, Chapter 4 was great, but you say that there is only one more chapter. I can't help but be disappointed. It felt like the story was just getting started. I guess I'm curious to see if the ending will be happy or tragic. The story seems like it is getting cut short rather abruptly, which leans more toward something unfortunate happening.
Date: August 23 2018 11:43 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
A new chapter! Yessss! I was getting nervous. Can't wait to read more.
Date: August 13 2018 2:08 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Hope I didn't scare you off because of a tiny bit of constructive criticism. Seems like this story is already dying off. That's fairly typical for this site. No judgement here.
Author's Response: Oh no, I’ve just been busy lately. I had to rewrite the next chapter as it felt a little too rushed into what I’m hopefully planning. I hope to have the next chapter out before the end of the week. Hopefully.
Date: August 10 2018 3:28 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
It would be really interesting if it turned out that Zavannah knows Marleigh, like they're friendly coworkers or something like that. Zavannah drops Jackie at Marleigh's place, and is surprised that Marleigh is hanging out with micro people. That could be a fun scenario.
I guess some readers are hoping it will turn into some kind of lesbian sex triangle insertion fest, but honestly that would detract from the story, especially this early in the story. Again, best criticism I can offer is don't rush it. I noticed more grammar mistakes in this chapter than the first two. Some of the wording was awkward and hard to understand.
Date: August 07 2018 3:32 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
I need to reread this latest chapter once more before I can post a full review, but I like the potential possibilities it brings to the table.
Date: August 03 2018 9:42 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Another good chapter, I enjoyed the one on one interaction. I hope to see some physical interaction eventually, but I really like this so far
Date: August 03 2018 2:39 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
This story is great, really interested in where it's going. Kind of hope Jackie ends up moving into and living inside Marleigh's shoe soles on a permanent basis, maybe with air holes for sweat to steam through.
[Report This]Date: July 31 2018 8:34 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Great stuff! Hopefully Jackie will take a liking to riding the "bus". Perhaps Marleigh can even change Jackie's mind about mixed size relationships. Don't rush this one! Could be an amazing story.
Date: July 31 2018 4:14 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Despite the shortness of this chapter, I am already hooked.
You've done a great job of crafting a world here, and I absolutely love the concept and cannot wait to read more.
I personally would love to ride a 'bus' like this one. And for some crazy reason, I'm thinking of Jackie and Marleigh in an eventual giant/tiny relationship...
Also, just wondering, would it be ok for me to write a story set in this same continuity/universe? I just love the world building you've done here and would love to write a spin on it myself