Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: July 08 2018 11:04 AM Title: Chapter 3: Normalizing the situation

Love how intimidating Laura is just by being there and moving a little. The dogs reaction and Mr Holtby with his shotgun gives off a funny contrast.

The "Tuds"-sound of giant foot steps makes it feel more real.

Your doing ok by describing the situation and feeling you want to bring accros.
Keep practicing English by watching films and series in that language with subtitels in your native language. English is also not my first language.

 

Author's Response:

Thanks for your words! Yeah, I've been practising for many years using those methods too:D