Date: April 13 2019 12:33 AM Title: Chapter Twenty-One
Holy shit that was something, a beautifully crafted dream sequence that made think of Bayonetta given the hair coming to life etc.
That ending was also a little curious so I'm wondering what you have in store.
Date: April 09 2019 8:31 PM Title: Chapter Twenty-One
Adrian’s big again, yay! She actually chose to regrow Melanie as well. After everything she did, including making her kill Erin.
I wonder how this is gonna go. Has Adrian decided not to regrow everyone, and instead to run away with Melanie? The police are looking for Melanie, so I’m not sure how well that would go. They did just try to kill her, so it would be understandable to that she would harbor resentment towards them, but keeping them as toys to be shared between her and Melanie seems like a bit much. And I wonder how things are going with Nicky and Juniper as well. Man, there is so much to wrap up in this story, I can’t believe Endless is coming to an end!
Date: April 03 2019 6:01 PM Title: Chapter Twenty
A lot to take in here.
An amazing battle between Paige and Mel, like Freddy vs Jason or Alien vs Predator before it it was a back and forth tussle that left no room for mistakes.
I was not expecting the ending but I am more curious than ever to see what happens when we next visit Mel and Adrian.
Hehe, I'm glad it was unexpected! I really enjoyed having this twist in mind, and it's been in my head since very early in the story's making.
Everything comes to an end, even Endless. Chapter twenty-two will be the final chapter of my story, so we'll see the conclusion to Melanie and Adrian's tale soon. Thank you so much for your readership over these past several months~
Date: April 02 2019 4:24 PM Title: Chapter Twenty
Is it bad that I was rooting for Melanie in this fight? I just want Adrian to get out all right :(
I think that my order of caring about the living tinies is Adrain, Nicky, Scarlet, Chloe, then Kimberly. I could give negative fucks about Bradz, the Dean, and Paige. I used to have more sympathy for Kimberly, but she just got more bitchy as time went on. At least Scarlet has been consistent.
It's a pretty messy conflict! Paige had good intentions, but Melanie loves Adrian. Someone had to win~
Aww, poor Kimberly! She's been hardened for sure. After everything she's been through, as well as being the oldest of the victims (at least til Bradz joined them), she's become quite the different person. She doesn't want anyone to get themselves hurt, and she knows how the youth can be.
Thank you for the review~
Date: March 18 2019 6:37 PM Title: Chapter Nineteen
A lot to take in.
Juniper seems to be on a collision course with Mel but the wallflower turned goddess seems to have a bigger problem brewing. As for Paige she seems like another case of wallflower turned titaness complex coming to the surface.
Date: March 18 2019 11:50 AM Title: Chapter Nineteen
I saw you had posted a new chapter last night but I was too sick out of my mind to read it until now lol. But man, I’m really wanting to see a spin off with Paige after this story is over! I love her mean streak and would love to see how her story would go if you do choose to go that route. Excited to see how this one goes first tho!
Thank you for the read and the review~ Your excitement is always encouraging.
Date: March 05 2019 7:02 AM Title: Chapter Eighteen
@DSG, this story /is/ a thriller. It legit has me reading the chapters so urgently because of the suspense it has me in. And this is coming from a guy who comes to this site only for the fetish side of stories. This story has me so wrapped into the story that it’s insane. If you go into stories (especially crime thrillers) expecting perfectness, you’re gonna be disappointed most (if not all) of the time. Even a movie I view as near perfect (The Dark Knight), I can admit it has quite a few flaws in the story (namely, the Joker’s plan relies on a lot of luck). To bash a story as much as you have just cuz there’s a bit of plot armor on the main character is just crazy.
And it also blows my mind that you say CurseCrazy hasn’t “shown” that Melanie is cute (which I assume you mean personality wise and not physical). It’s actually blown me away how much character CC has put into this story with every single character but especially with Melanie. The way she stutters around everyone even her roommate who she lives with and especially with Adrian who is her biggest crush of all, the way she’s shy and awkward in social interactions. These are attributes that a lot of people find “cute”. You may not (I’m curious what attributes you find cute and how you’d prefer them being presented in stories tbh), but that doesn’t mean that the Melanie character isn’t written well or fleshed out. This might not be my top favorite story of all time on this site but it’s definitely the best written one by far imo.
Date: March 05 2019 2:01 AM Title: Chapter One
@Saf To an extent I get what you are saying, but I agree with CurseCrazy in that the distinction that this is an adult website for adults is not clear enough. Honestly I have not thought much about this being an "adult" website until reading the comments here, I always just thought of it as a website for stories that feature people of differing sizes, and I know many others who do as well. The lack of many warnings and the inclusion of what seems like a child inclusive rating system (G, PG, R, such) does not help the website in this regard.
At the same time I disagree with the notion that a story that is posted here is inherently "adult," but since the author says the story should be read as such at all times, this one is inherently adult. However, being an adult story does not mean that it is not breaking rules when it breaks the rules of prose or storytelling, as I already discussed in my last comment.
But if crafting a compelling narrative or well written is not the intent, then there is not much more for me to say. In the end we should be writing for ourselves either way, so there's no harm, I just mistook the story as attempting to be something of a thriller since it had a lot of the bones of one.
@CurseCrayCray, oh and I am pretty sure you have referred to Mel as cute in-story before, which is why I brought it up. I think this is example of yourself sorta entering the story a bit too much, which can be distracting and pull the reader out, which one generally does not want to do when writing erotica, especially fantastical erotica. Again though, if that is by design then that is fine, but it seems like you were aware you were doing this.
Using ctrl+f pulls up 40 instances of the word "cute," but none have been used to describe Melanie or her actions. That would be consistent with the audience opinion that Melanie, generally speaking, isn't considered cute. So if there is any place where I've referred to Melanie as cute in-story, maybe I used a different adjective, then... my bad! I still don't think I've made that error, but if it's there, that's definitely a mistake. I know fully that Melanie isn't conventionally attractive, so it isn't my intent to contradict that in the story. I just think that what makes Melanie cute to me are many of the things people find ugly about her, haha.
Date: March 04 2019 6:45 PM Title: Chapter Eighteen
Poor Nicky but at least Juniper seems the safer of the rescue options at the moment but you have to feel for the tiny people and their luck this chapter.
Not horrible but not exactly inspiring for their futures.
Hopefully their luck turns around soon! Juniper and Paige are kind of wild cards, so who knows what lies ahead? Thank you for the positive review~
Date: March 04 2019 2:38 AM Title: Chapter Eighteen
Man I legit never click on anything faster than when you post a new chapter! I have it set for it to send me a notification each time you post a new one. I so can’t wait for each and every new chapter! I’m so intrigued on where this story is going!! The torture of Bradz was honestly one of my favorite parts of this story (second only to Candy being swallowed)! Hope the next chapter isn’t as long as a wait as this one but even if it is, I’m sure it’ll be just as perfect as this one!!
So much energy in this review, I love it! Thank you for such encouraging words. This chapter was a little late, heh. It was a little on the longer side, and I was debating for awhile just how to divide up these final few chapters. I didn't want it to run on for so long, but I really couldn't feel any better alternatives. I was also sick for a couple days, which didn't help. At all. But I'm glad you enjoyed it enough that one of the scenes could be heralded as a favorite! I didn't expect that from this chapter, of all chapters, to be honest... Well, as always, thanks for the review! (And if you live in the states, then... sorry for these 1 am notifications! My schedule is pretty funny in that regard...)
Date: February 20 2019 10:26 AM Title: Chapter One
@DarkStarGoddess I mean. This is primarily kink/fetish website, period. If you come here looking for other types of content, that's on you. If by "younger people," you mean minors, they shouldn't be here. This website has blatantly pedophilic rape porn stories. While I realize minors are gonna come on here anyway because that's what they do, a site with content like this shouldn't be made out to be anything other than what it is: a fetish site.
Date: February 14 2019 4:19 AM Title: Chapter One
I really wish this website had better communication features, it would be interesting to discuss writing with some of the reviewers here, but the medium does not make for stimulating discussion or civilized conversation, the medium of these reviews makes comments seem more bold and confrontational than they probably are. I say this because I am not calling anyone out with this review, I am just thinking out loud because it is late and I am having trouble sleeping.
One comment I want to make is on what Saf has said; the author having a specific kink does not mean they are immune to bad writing. I would not say it is bad art since art is very subjective and personal to the creator, but writing prose generally has rules and general guidelines to follow in order to achieve maximum effectiveness. You can't say breaking the rules is not breaking the rules because it makes your peepee hard.
But contrivance, when used to such a massive degree as it is done in this story is a writing flaw, and it is not one you can fault readers for being annoyed at.
I see down below the author and Ghostwriter talked about how Plot Armor (contrivance) is mandated for a story like this, and I wholeheartedly disagree: having to fall back on contrivance means that the story has not been fleshed out enough to allow for a better reasoning for the events happening, or the author lacks the writing skills to pull off the idea. It is a lazy writing tool; now, a little here and there might not be so bad, as the author claims, but saying a little is used in this story is flat out false, it is used heavily in this story, more than many I have seen.
Contrivance basically punishes the reader for caring about the story. It creates unsatisfying payoffs, and when used repeatedly it makes the reader feel like they are wasting their time. Of course, if the contrivances make for better jerk off material it can be ignored by those jerking off to it, but that does not mean it is still a storytelling flaw.
That leads me into my second point on Saf's comment, I do not think it is entirely fair to say that people can not judge a story because it might be used as jerk off material for some. I do not believe that a story being posted to this website inherently makes it sexual, and there are a number of younger readers who come here, as well as readers who come here because they enjoy sized themed fiction despite not having sexual interest, such as myself as an asexual female. I and others like me are as much a part of this website as anyone else, as much as the GTS community is designed to serve hetero male fantasies, but that is not an argument for now.
Now I am not saying the story is bad or anyone who likes it is bad or the author is bad with this comment, but it is incorrect to say that using contrivance in this way is not bad writing.
Another comment I want to make, and this one is more addressed at the author, is about how the audience perceives Mel: you do not show her as cute. Like, at all. You directly TELL us she is cute, but... who are you? You are not in the story. The story does not have anything redeeming for her. I might have mentioned this before, I forget, but this is super cliche but SHOW DON'T TELL. Telling is Mel is cute is lazy, showing us her cute actions or characters reacting to cuteness. I fall into this trap too I think everyone does, but it would help if that is what you want.
It could be that your idea of cute and what most people think as cute are at odds too, possibly.
There is also the possible issue that you have inserted yourself too much into the story and it is blocking the reader's view of the story, but that is a conversation for a different time.
Anyways I am just thinking out loud after reading the recent reviews, no one take anything personally, hope all the best for the story.
When I say Melanie is cute, I do indeed say that with a knowing, smug grin on my face, the fact that most people would, in fact, not consider Melanie cute. When I blatantly tell reviewers that Melanie is cute, I do so half-jokingly, understanding that to someone who isn't interested in the creepy aesthetic of dark, haunting women like I am, Melanie would probably come off as gross, horrid, unlikeable. I've never been bashful to admit, even from the very beginning, that Melanie was designed for me, with my interests in my mind. Furthermore, I do defend myself from the "show, don't tell" writing critique: my responses to reviews are not part of the Endless canon, and shouldn't reflect the quality of the writing. In-story, I have not referred to Melanie as explicitly cute -- unless I'm totally blanking out on a stray comment I made about her! I don't think I am, especially since I've had it in mind that "cuteness" and the identification of cuteness is a running theme. It hasn't really been coincidence that so often I've used the phrase "cute girl" in regards to how Melanie views people around her.
I think the note I'll leave this response on, as it extends to the rest of the topics brought up too, is that my endgoal here is to share the story that's in my heart, the way I invision it, and express that story with the size community as best to my abilities. There are going to be elements many don't like or understand or sympathize with, elements that do break the immersion if read as a casual story, but my hope is that those flaws would be forgiven as they're somewhat necessary evils for what is... ultimately, my erotic giantess fantasy, where much of the erotic and fantasy comes from aspects that don't make for a bestseller. I'm rambling, but I hope what I'm saying is understood. For my erotic giantess-shrinking yandere fantasy story to exist as it does in my heart, and for that to be expressed purely, there will have to be plot armor. My heart demands it, go talk to it.
I will also mention this, as it did come up and I'd like to make a statement: I do not support "younger audiences" reading this story. I don't think this website makes this distinction clear enough, especially considering the legitimately disturbing synopsises of stories listed here and what that says of this ragtag community, but this story is purely for audiences 18 and older. To tie this back into the discussion earlier, it's not been my intention, ever, for this story to be read and critically acclaimed by a wide audience. Although my writing is, allegedly, good enough to make an engaging story, I've not committed to writing it with making a literary masterpiece. It is an erotic adult story and should be read as such at all times, even if there's more emotion and drama behind it than the usual erotic novel.
Thank you for the readership and the review! I know I don't respond to reviews until I push out a new chapter, but this provoked some thoughts from me that I didn't want to lose. For anyone curious, the next chapter is coming! It is. Delays have certainly come up but I promise the next chapter will be out very soon! Thank you thank you for your patience~
(Also, just so everyone is clear, Melanie is cute, everyone else just has bad taste.)
Date: January 16 2019 9:08 PM Title: Chapter Seventeen
Oh what a fun chapter. Melanie did slip, but will it actually cost her? So far she really hasn't had to work too hard to get out of tough situations.
Can't wait to see what paiges involvement will be. Great story keep it up!
Thank you for the review! I hope the story continues to entertain you as the twists unravel!
Date: January 16 2019 4:36 AM Title: Chapter One
Great story! I'm loving every chapter so far! The dialogues are quite beyond what we are used to and makes you want to enter the story.
P.S: Do I see a fan of JackSmith's 'Julia' here? The plot has many similarities. If so, exceptional reference!
Ah, it warms my heart to see an appreciation for the dialogue. With a story like this, hearing their thoughts aloud has a lot of impact, and making enticing conversations is important. I'm sure there's... some chats in Endless that are unnecessary, I could probably have skimmed those, but I'm glad you've enjoyed them!
Unfortunately I don't know a Jack Smith or a Julia! Perhaps it's worth it for me to check it out? Thank you for the review nonetheless~
Date: January 14 2019 2:57 AM Title: Chapter Seventeen
Another great chapter. The debate between the captives, the scene with Melanie and Chloe, and the capture of the professor were all really well done. I'm curious what's going to happen with Paige; I'd been expecting both her and the professor to be shrunken by the end of the chapter.
Comments like this make me wonder what kind of visual people have for Melanie in their mind. Perhaps the ugliness of her nature sticks with folks and represents itself in that way.
There's that, and also I think we take cues from how the other characters view her, especially before they find out her secret. As far as I can remember they always see her as either bland or off-putting.
Indeed, indeed, other characters aren't too charitable in how they see Melanie. But you can take my word: Melanie is actually adorable, eye bags and obsessiveness included! Those are features, not flaws.
It's pleasant to see you enjoyed so many scenes. I sometimes wonder if the less-giantess related content flows well with people, like the debate in the bag. Necessary scenes for sure, but I worry they drag on too much for an audience likely more interested in the giant women parts. But I've made it this far dragging my feet, I guess I haven't done anything too awful yet.
Thank you thank you for the review~
Date: January 13 2019 7:46 PM Title: Chapter Seventeen
Damn, Adrian's turn towards the darker side is a bit of a fun twist but I trust her judgement on this one. Bradz is kind of a bitch so while bad its not too bad like most of the others.
The Paige curveball though I am most interested in.
I hope Paige can prove to be an interesting new element in the story! A curveball for sure, but I still need to stick the landing, I'd say. I'm excited to get feedback on Paige especially, I've been wondering how folks will react to her! Thanks again for the review~
Date: January 13 2019 2:41 PM Title: Chapter Seventeen
Good to see that Melanie is so powerful and simply does what she does. I like it.
It's so annoying when some huge girl is bossed around by some plebs or tinies.
I think this story is a bit refreshing compared to all that bullshit.
As for the story itself, I can almost see Adrian turning in some psychopath and shrinking people together with Melanie.
Thank you for writing!
Thank you for reading~! Your encouragement means a lot!