Date: May 20 2018 9:22 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Ashley's Pussy
Wow... I got so wrapped up in this story that I read all four chapters so fast. We need mmoorrreee!
Lol, but seriously this story is simply amazing and the way it was written with specific details being included really felt that the scene was unfolding right in front of me. I also enjoyed how realistic it felt in terms of how the date went and how Ashley slowly open her self up more and was actually looking forward to this moment. I will definitely keep a look out on this story now, I really can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the amazing work!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback! I'm truly, earnestly trying to find the right balance between detail and progression. I like to read stories that have a lot of detail and internal dialogue, but I find it really rare that an author nails the formula of dense writing which has a steady, slow, cumulative payoff. Every chapter I write I end up accomplishing half of what I want to, so I actively try to keep things moving rather than getting swamped in detail. Let me know if it moves too fast!