Date: May 22 2018 1:30 PM Title: Chapter 5 - Pushing her to the Brink
Whoa... this build up though. Had to clean my screen after reading this chapter! Lol jk
Another amazing chapter but now It left me with some questions. Based on how she was reacting in this chapter, does she know that she can grow? I just get the feeling that in this chapter, she was trying to maintain focus but with Jeff slowly taking that away, that she could start to grow? I could be wrong though! Can't wait to read what happens next!!
I feel like you're touching upon the magic of GTS storytellling. I won't give anything away, but I'll say that I personally prefer stories in which the growth or shrinking mechanics have some rules that are unique to that story. They have to make sense through the whole progression of the story, or I lose my immersion.
I'll also say that I dropped a lot of red herrings into this tale already to keep the readers guessing. Hoping that you're enjoying the mystery so far!
Date: May 21 2018 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Meeting at the Bar
Dude I always think you’re all done then you pop back out of the blue! Glad to see you’re still active. This definitely feels like a change of pace from your last two stories. It’s good stuff so far!
You all done with Audrey?
I sincerely hope to finish Audrey before too long. I'm really conflicted about how to end that story, keeping in mind that a lot of the ideas I'm currently excited for are best used in new stories. I think the quickest way to work on her tale is to start a few new stories, and work out my writer's cramps there. Thanks for asking, as I never know what the community wants until they ask.
Date: May 20 2018 9:22 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Ashley's Pussy
Wow... I got so wrapped up in this story that I read all four chapters so fast. We need mmoorrreee!
Lol, but seriously this story is simply amazing and the way it was written with specific details being included really felt that the scene was unfolding right in front of me. I also enjoyed how realistic it felt in terms of how the date went and how Ashley slowly open her self up more and was actually looking forward to this moment. I will definitely keep a look out on this story now, I really can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the amazing work!!
Thanks for the feedback! I'm truly, earnestly trying to find the right balance between detail and progression. I like to read stories that have a lot of detail and internal dialogue, but I find it really rare that an author nails the formula of dense writing which has a steady, slow, cumulative payoff. Every chapter I write I end up accomplishing half of what I want to, so I actively try to keep things moving rather than getting swamped in detail. Let me know if it moves too fast!