Awsome work so far!

Nooo! I thought this story was just getting started and it was going to take at least 50 chapters or soemthing!

I should have known. The best writers tend to either never update their stories, or they finish way too fast. And wow, this story went by fast.

As far as Gloria's reaction, it was unexpected. I was hoping for a little bit of a shock, and maybe she decides to hide him and be sneaky. She seems like a different person and it doesn't feel the same.

Tatiana's plot was just a side plot to the story and nothing real happened between her and John. Kinda dissapointing to see Tatiana get involved becuase I wanted the focus on Gloria and I felt that Tatitiana was stealing the spotlight this chapter.

The whole spiritual thing at the end feels like it's part of some other story. There was never any hint that this whole story was just to get John to be stuck with these women. Part of me just wanted John to be stuck like this because the women wanted him to there, and not because they are obeying some command of some spiritual being.

The one sexy moment of this chapter was when Gloria proudly stated that John was going to be here and to serve her and give her pleasure. That line was amazing. Even Gloria talking about having some sexy fun is amazing.

The whole "choose" concept is kinda weird. Sure, I guess if I was in his position, a choice is good, but I think it's sexier if he was forced to please them and not hade a choice. Also, I'm not choosing Kate, Emma, or even Tatiana. If I get to choose, I'm choosing Gloria and Gloria exclusively.

If the story was just going to be 10-11 chapters, the first 4-5 should have been about John about to choose and the rest just be about Gloria having her way with John. Well, I guess that's how I would have done it. Seems like John will choose next chapter and then he only gets a small time with Gloria.

Please tell me there is a part 2 or something similar. You have set up a nice little story here and the fun looks like it's just getting started. I mean, so far it seems that Kate and Emma had the most time with John, which is alright I guess, but it seems that only 1 chapter was dedicated to Gloria and I would have loved to see more of her.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Your investment in the story means a lot, but pacing this particular one was difficult since I was just going by ear. I definitely plan to continue things, maybe this story, maybe not, this was just more of a test. The next story I write will definitely be more fleshed out, but I wanted to experiment with different characters and settings to see what I enjoyed writing most. I won't say this is the end of this story forever, but yeah updates will definitely be much for infrequent at best.