Reviewer: MacroGod Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29 2019 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 1: Change on the Horizon

Holy shit! What an intro! I wonder what the hell that light was... O.O

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: May 04 2018 9:21 PM Title: Chapter 1: Change on the Horizon

Just read all 5 chapter and it was a wild ride!

I was a little hesitant about reading this story at first because I thought it was going to be just about the daughters and lots of incest stuff. However, you surprised me, because you made these relatives so far apart, that it kind of feels like strangers, so it works out for me. Also, the best part of this story was the inclusion of Gloria which you didn't mention much in your story summary.

First off, welcome to giantess world. You definately belong here with your talented writing. Even the stuff that I'm not into is interesting because of how well you write. The flow is smooth and you have the characters involved with many tasks so the story doesn't get boring. You include many twists such as yoga, the missing husband, the other shrunken boy, the dreams, so it's all very creative.

Let's talk Gloria. What a milf! Your description of her in the first chapter made me excited. Late 30s, fit, light brown hair and blue eyes. Beautiful. She even sounds like a mom in the story which is great. I didn't want her to feel like a girly tennager so I'm glad you had the right dialogue for her. John even had a dream about her while he was under her during the yoga session. That was hot and I love his imagination about getting trapped within the bra cup and also in her pussy.

One thing im not too sure of is the two daughters. I believe they are too smart for their age. In the first chapter, I see the familiar young girl behavior where they assault John with questions about boys and such. Then they turn into girls with the minds of late teen girls already talking about boys as if they have dated plenty of times and act as if they are professionals. Not just Kate, but also Emma. You mention that Kate has physical differences with her curves, but mentally, both girls seem very similar with attitudes of 20 year olds in the later chapters. In addition to their age, I'm hoping nothing too sexual happens with them since they are very young. I like how instead you have them making schemes and planning how they can tease John. I enjoyed the part where Kate asked John if he liked being trapped under her mom's body. Makes me wonder what other ideas she has.

Questions: Does Gloria know that Kate can shrink people? Is Gloria aware of John being tiny? (I would love to see her be aware of him soon.) Can Gloria shrink people or is it just Kate? How small is John when he is shrunk? (I'm hoping around 3 inches). Or could Kate change John's size from 1 inch to 3 inches, to 6 inches, etc?

Ideas: this story has a great setup which leads to many possibilities that could happen. I would love the focus to be on Gloria, the hot mom since she is the goddess of this story. I'm not that fond of Kate or Emma, so most of these ideas will be about Gloria.

I liked the reviewer "chase"'s idea about Gloria's husband being gone so Gloria might have this longing for some sexual pleasure. While this may be easier with Gloria being aware of him, there are still many fun things to do while she is unaware. Kate could drop John on the driver seat of Gloria's car so she will sit on him. Perhaps, Gloria has her own favorite sex toy and Kate puts John inside it. Maybe the sex doll is a Ken doll, but Gloria likes to wrap it up like a mummy and imagine it as her husband. Now imagine Kate wrapping John up like a mummy and replacing him with the Ken doll in Gloria's fun drawer so Gloria has fun with John, but its still unaware.

Now if that's too much of a stretch, we could also have Kate sew, tie or tape John to the front part of the inside of Gloria's favorite panties in her underwear drawer so when Gloria decides to put them on, John gets trapped agasint the crotch of Gloria with his body lined up perfectly with her pussy. Gloria might feel horny while she wears him around as she goes to work, as she works out and also when she sleeps. Maybe this could be when Gloria discovers John being tiny and decides to keep him tiny and tells him how much she loves him stuck in her panties and admits how long it's been since she has been pleasured.

Of course, if Gloria is aware of John, I would love to see her decide to keep John as her personal toy and while John initially thinks it's sexy and alright, he starts wanting to escape and that's where Gloria decides to tie him up to her body and use him as a replacement for her husband. Kate and Emma will be happy to see their mom being happy and decide to let John stay alive as long as he satisfies Gloria. Together, they enjoy their life as a new happy family.

This story is fantastic and I wonder why there aren't that many review yet. Hopefully this review is what you are looking for to inspire and motivate your writing.

Apologies for the big review, but I just so into this story. Hopefully, you have a large response to this review so I won't feel as bad. I would love to see if you agree with some of my ideas.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Hey thanks so much for the review, I appreciate all of it! It started off with zero direction and I'm not sure how kosher it is to edit the description after already starting the story but I think the focus will be heavily on Gloria coming up. As for the girls, I'm leaning towards their innocent demeanor being more of a facade because, you know, once you start kidnapping and "disposing" of people you probably tend to mature a little faster but I think you're right - it's difficult separating a 9 year old's point of view with a teenager. I agree with most if not all of your ideas, eventually Gloria has to become aware of John right? I'm not sure when that will be yet since I'm not sure how long I want the story to go on for. You may have noted that John has yet to contact his family back home, that's being worked into something. 

Anyway, thanks again for the review and the warm welcome. I hope you keep enjoying the story!

Reviewer: daftpunk Signed [Report This]
Date: May 03 2018 12:59 PM Title: Chapter 1: Change on the Horizon

i liked that! and if you do decide to continue it you could perhaps do some chapters on emma/kate playing pranks on gloria by having them put the protagonist in unaware giantess situations. i.e. Making gloria think he's a doll/stress toy to squeeze, leaving him in the shower/gloria's yoga mat while she works out/ in her food bowl during family dinner.

cheers

Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback! I can definitely work on some unaware stuff.