Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: October 26 2018 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 11

Dr. Creep,
What an exciting and powerful chapter. Ewww, I think I just stepped on a little. No concern about him but there is concern with cleaning her shoe. I like that a sales lady comes over. It gives the reader the fear that they may be seen and captured.
To me the parts that scare me the most are the possibilities of being captured. The security lady is basically past tank and he makes the mistake of screaming in fear. Even big guys get scared. Of course tank's big is about 3 inches. I love how you show how minuscule they are to the lady. Tank starts his run and runs into a wall of pink flesh that closes. A fantastic sentence Dr. Creep. It really shows how tiny and helpless they are to Her. His pleas and begging show his fear of the Giantess. What can he do in her grip? This is chilling to me. His feelings mean nothing to the security lady. Into her purse he goes. He's just a little a worthless being in stature. Just a little creature that she can use or eliminate however she sees fit. One of the most chilling and favorite scenes of my life.
Now their exhausting journey ends and there's Curtis and his two lackeys waiting for them. Imagine John turning around and seeing the Gigantic Mary Ellen standing there. How She towers so far into the sky as she looks down at the tiny 3 inch men. I am especially excited to see Mary Ellen walk over and reach down and capture curtis and his two lackeys. Or does She walk over and simply step on them 1,2,3. The advantage of standing over men who are probably not as tall as her ankle.
My friend, I'm so enjoying this story. Between the exciting action and the overwhelming Giantesses.
The way the ladies easily squash the tiny men under their high heeled shoes or capture the miniature men within their massive hand it's my favorite story.
Thank you,
Diesel

Author's Response:

The thing is, I'm pretty sure how this would go should a group of us be fending for ourselves at those sizes out in the real world..   People organized into gangs, lone wolves like Nate Dog.  Lost ones like John.  Accidentls like the sales lady..  Opportunists like the security guard etc. 

Yes the advantage is clearly to the soccer mom who happens upon them on another trip to the mall for cloths as women love to do.  For me, going to a department store is like being forced to change the oil on a car..  Something that has to be done but is a pain in the ass the whole time you do it.

I think it would all be too easy for the Giants if this event truly did transpire...  They'd have the strength, size, speed, and in some cases the intellectual advantage over us too..  They'd have access to technology that we couldn't even dream of operating anymore like computers, phones, and automobiles..   We'd have to rely on them for just about everything which would mean that the power structure that we once fit into with them would reverse in virtually every situation which I tried to show here.

Thanks again Disel!  

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: October 26 2018 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 11

Oh my goodness! What a cliffhanger! Please tell me you are posting the next chapter soon! After this ending, I am so anxious to see what happens next.

Let’s stsrt with the beginning of this chapter. They are chased by Sammy and he gets stepped on by this beautiful woman, I’m sure. While I may think the stomp was exciting, I doubt John did as Sammy’s organs flew onto John.

Then there was tank and how he got captured by the security guard. I love how you described that Tank was trying to point them out but he couldn’t since the guard was pinning his arms to his sides. Now that’s kinda hot because it flirts with danger. Also, I love how she said that she will earn 1000 bucks with him. It really makes me wonder what she will do to him. I’m guessing she will rent him out as a toy. Now wouldn’t that be the life.

Then there was that final scene, where Kurtis and his goons are ready to fight John, but Mary Ellen shows up and my heart almost stops. She identifies John and it looks like she is ready to pick him up. You said she is in a sports jumpsuit. I looked it up, and it looks nice. Makes me believe that she is athletic and fit, which I hope she is.

Now once she called out to John, you said “everybody” looked up to see the soccer mom, which makes me wonder if Mary sees Kurtis and his thugs too.

Since Nate is with John, we know for sure that she sees Nate with John, but since Kurtis is by a bench, I’m not sure if she sees them.

I was expecting Mary to find John one on one, and play with him, but I think having more tiny guys is a better solution. Mary has daughters, I forgot how many, but I think they wanted John since he was a tiny guy to play with.

I think I know where you are going with this. Mary will take all of them. John, Nate, Kurtis and his friends. Obviously they should be carried separatly. Then, Mary will give her daughters one of the thugs each so they can play and do whatever they want with them. Perhaps Kurtis gets a quick death from the giantess and I’m not sure what happens with Nate. For John, Mary keeps him for a while as her own play toy, hopefully sexual. Since she remembers John’s name, she had to be at least thinking about him, having a small man in her hands, at her mercy.

Well, at least that’s how I would imagine it. Please tell me Mary is a naughty soccer mom. It’s so exciting! With the addition of these other tinies, many things can happen with Mary Ellen! I can’t wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Well the good news is that I already have the next chatper written Tom and there will be only a brief wait for it to be posted so that people don't get overloaded with this material and have time to digest.

They are all out in the open so if she sees John she sees them all.

The $1000 dollars for the security guard was a referral to an earlier chapter where stray humans wind up in orphanages and that she was going to collect the reward for turning one in.   And I liked the frustration angle for Tank to want to be able to bring his rivals down with him but the stupid security guard just was too excited to take notice of anything other than what was her immediate reward for turning him in.

As to your prediction to what happens next, please don't become a psychic this week as you're bound to have a rocky beginning..

I'm actually happy to see that you got things wrong at the end of your review because this tells me that what comes next was not so predictable which I abhor being.

I think that you will be happy with the next chapter never the less though and wont it be better that the unexpected happened rather than something that you saw coming?

 

Thanks again for patroning this story Tom and leaving very thoughtful remarks and assessments. :)