[Report This]Date: October 23 2018 5:44 PM Title: Chapter 10
I love the tense slow pacing of the escalator scene. It felt like a mini movie.
Using a giantess to stop other tiny guys is quite the strategy.
Just to clarify, the size is 2.75 inches, not feet, right? Or did I get them mixed up?
I was wondering if maybe Rebecca would have seen the guys chasing John and Nate and decided to take one of those guys along with her brother.
I love how you posted only 2 days after your previous chapter! When I saw this on the most recent again, I thought I accidentally was on the second page, but no, you posted again, which is awesome!
Hmm. I never thought of an escalator as something that deadly. Great use of the environment. That’s creative.
Is this the last Mall scene? Maybe I’m just getting anxious, but I think I’m in love with Mary the soccer mom. I would love to see her again.
Anyway, I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Two point seven five inches is the current height of our main protagonist.. Most others stop at 3" or three inches.
Right, the weather had finaly turned chilly in my neck of the woods which means less to do outside so when that's the case better to write I figure.. In fact. I think I do most of my writing in the winter for that single solitary reason.
He, he, he.. Don't worry about Mary Ellen.. She's out there somewhere... Prowling around. ;) When I come up with scenes that I think are potentially lethal if you really think about them is when I'm out in the real world doing real world things.... At three or less inches tall, just think of how massive an escalator would be... Something that we take for granted at normal height would be terrifying to someone due to what it actually does.. It spits out uneven metal stairs and swallows them back up.. There are metal grooves on the tops of them for constant traction but to a tiny foot they would be very unpractical and even dangrous if you foot got caught in betwee them. If you are on them while they are doing that then this immedietly becomes a problem... They are moving as fast as a freight train to you as well if we remember how little distance would be covered by somebody so small... Then you've got the metal gears making everything shake.. Again, something very slight to us yet monumental to someone who weighs only ounces or less. And escalators are in most all stores that have two stories or more in a mall.. So they'd be quite unescapable if you wished to move between levels.. Hence they were featured prominantely.. Ok, now Tom, I challenge you to go to a shopping mall this weekend or the next and just look around the department stores... Where would you find cover and more importantly where would you try to traverse a world of Giants who you do not wish to discover you lest you become their next interesting acquisition?.... Looking around, I would use clothing racks or the undersides of sales desks if their bottoms were recessed a little from the fronts/backs/and sides as many do... Sometimes when I go out I like to look around me and try to image where I would go if I were in a grocery store or shopping mall etc... Then I start to see the places of cover or certain detection if I were caught out in the open or if a room didn't offer any protection... Then you default to lighting and shadows as the next best thing.. Just stuff I think about all the time, he he. Thanks a lot for your thoughtful review and I hope that my responce was adequete to what you wanted to know. As to if it is the last Mall scene, I'm sorry that I can not give you any spoilers at present but just ask you to please keep reading... There will be another update very soon so thanks again. :)
Date: October 23 2018 2:56 PM Title: Chapter 10
Wow, a lot of action in this chapter. Nate has proven to be a very resourceful guy. Worth the shoes that he gave up. I thought for sure that Rebecca would end up capturing the gang. A horrible thought for them but one that would lead to less aggravation for Rebecca's brother because She would have new toys to play with.
Running across the aisle is dangerous but it may be the only way to lose them. Plus I trust Nate's instincts.
I was surprised and happy to see a new chapter. I guess once you get on a roll the creativity gets flowing. This is such an exciting part of an already thrilling story. There's nothing like living the shrunken life. I am greatly enjoying this story.
Later,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Well.. Fate has some things in store for the gang suffice it to say without giving out any spoilers..
You will be happy that another one will be posted soon too! Striking while the iron is hot shall we say.
I'm very happy you've stuck with this story this long and suffice it to say, this story will have an ending and will not be left in lymbo like some of my others have.
So stay tuned Diesel as I'll have more for you very soon my friend. :)
Date: October 23 2018 6:57 AM Title: Chapter 10
This is an excellent story, and the periods between giantess interaction only reinforce the character and plot development. Looking forward to seeing what's next and how much smaller John gets!
Author's Response:
Thank you Bobbylaws... :)
Pulling off character development was exceptionally hard for this story due to the lack of attempted chronological order.. Perhaps a drawback to all of the other freedoms that this writing style gives.