[Report This]Date: October 21 2018 1:35 PM Title: Chapter 9
Wow Crocodile. I honestly thought you forgot about this story. It’s been awhile. Well, I’m glad you are back because I see potential in this story. Mary Ellen is her name Tom and... Well.. I wont give any spoilers away but suffice it to say, that I don't beleive that you are going to be let down when it comes to who is involved in this story or whether or not they return. I have to make things as plausible as possible ( a pet peeve of mine ) so therefore must see things as they have developed through to their believable ends... Stay with me and please keep up your support.. As a reward for the regulars doing just that, I'll post yet another chapter very soon.. Go Nate Dog and John!!!
I forgot about the mall scene. The other guy is kinda interesting, but I miss the giantess action. I know you have a third part to the mall scene, but I kinda do want John captured.
This teen girl scene felt like foreshadowing that John may eventually get captured. Ever since chapter 5, I have been asking for the return for the sexy neighbor soccer mom and I think this mall could be a great option to bring her back. You even said in your reply that you thought about bringing her back a lot. I know your opinion of her may have changed, but hopefully you still want to bring her back.
I find the neighbor extremely sexy since she had jogging gear on, doesnt seem crazy, but she is also interested by the way she was feeling John up with her fingers. I remember her name was Mary, and I would love to see Mary get her hands on John again. In chapter 5, John mentioned that he didn’t want to think about being given as a toy to Mary’s daughters, but I was thinking if John becomes an adult toy for Mary herself. I see her being this single soccer mom that is working hard for her family and working hard on her body and will see John as a form of stress release and excitement. This story could escalate into something erotic easily.
Once again Crocodile, I’m glad you are back and I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Date: October 21 2018 4:20 AM Title: Chapter 9
Loved it. It was cool his following him around and mimicking his safety precautions. It was exciting to almost be seen. I'm sure pauly wanted companionship. Misery loves company. Luckily Rebecca didn't notice him. She really would have loved to have taken him home.
One one hand he realizes how hard it is out here in the real world. Eating scrap food is never good. Eating food that some Giantess had stepped on would also eventually happen. He knows how much better he had it at home but also how poorly he was treated and how much his feelings didn't matter. I'm so glad that you've restarted this. It's such a fascinating story on what it's like to be small. I especially like the close encounters of being caught. I wonder who will eventually capture him? Maybe the neighbor. Just wondering out loud.
Loved it,
Diesel
Author's Response:
We'll have to wait and see about who captures him if he is captured at all.
But I do truly like talking about the little things that are not as sexy when it comes to how it would really be.. Most people only focus on their fantasy about given situation... But what about the other 23 hours of the day... Then things become not so fun and the fantasy if taken into the correct context is found to be a chimera... I've dwelled on this many times and the pit falls always eventually outweight the benefits of such a reallity... They day to day boring and depressing issues that would develop.. Or the terryfying downturns if somebody wants to sink even further into the unpleasantries...
I'm glad that you can appreciate some of the realities that I'm trying to convey here Diesel. You always have all of your lights on which makes you a brother in arms not to be overlooked by me.
Thanks for the wonderful review Diesel.
Crocodile
[Report This]Date: October 20 2018 6:12 PM Title: Chapter 9
Nice addition. Looking forward to the action ramping up! I noticed in this story you jump around quite a bit. Any chance this’ll go back to some of the stuff you skipped over but hinted at with his wife and sister in law?
Author's Response:
This story was intended to be jumped around in.. A different style from a chronological order yet adhering to it to a minor extent... Just the nature of this type of story John.
The wife is being covered now... And I thought I did a lot with the sister in law already but we'll see what the future holds.