[Report This]Date: February 19 2020 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 13
I'm always so glad to see this story updated, and this chapter did not disappoint! Loved seeing Ashley back in action again and being crueler than ever, the little bit about 80% of Ashley's clothes being other people he had transformed was such a great idea! The build up with Toby is long but totally worth it, stuff like that is what makes me love your stories so much as you get a lot more attached to the characters which makes their eventual demise all the better.
I'm sure it's going to get even better next chapter, it would be amazing to see Ashley use and eventually dispose of Toby, but it could also be nice to see them having a bit more cruel fun together before Ashley does it. Here's hoping for some more ass/scat in the future too, those are always my favorite chapters from you. For how long this chapter is I didn't see that many mistakes, so you did a great job.
Also is the Discord server still up? The link is expired for me, I'd really like to join it.
Author's Response:
thanks for the review and sorry about the discord like, I thought I set the link to never expire https://discord.gg/AC87bgP
Date: February 18 2020 2:06 PM Title: Chapter 13
Togheter with the introduction of the new character, which is so great as Toby has a lot of potential for the story, I love this quick but interesting look at Ashely's psychology. Through the previous chapter one could think that Ashely's friends stand in some kind of "safe ground"... however this let us know that's not the case.
For Toby, I think he could be somehow reclutant in some way or another, but perhaps turning into a crueler version of himself as Ashely shows his gift... however, as Toby becomes more and more active he could be, unnoticingly, giving to Ashely the ideas of what to do whith him... that would be quite ironic XD... Toby being used with his own ideas XD
[Report This]Date: February 16 2020 8:51 PM Title: Chapter 13
very good not is was so much fun to read of the length but also seeing Ashley again in action. I missed him kinda during the past chapter. I would like to see this more often maybe if possible Ashley binding people to him and then let them fall in a very mean way totally him not giving a shit and even enjoying it. ashley should totally use toby in a cruel way. and toby has no clue.
[Report This]Date: February 16 2020 5:34 PM Title: Chapter 13
what a read! I always was a huge fan of your character and plot development and how you have this talent for building up. love the whole ashely got bored idea totally sitting there alone and thinking up what would kick his hornyness again and then by pure luck some bug went into his spider web. this is the entire thing of this story ashleys playthings right. I was a bit disappointed at the end that ashely didnt use his bug he cought in his web of physology, but then I read that you planed on doing so maybe in the next chaptr. I wouldnt want Toby become a ashley 2.0 I would totally want him to suffer not seing it coming and Ashely geting bored of him or something else. I enjoy this idea though a lot of you building up a new character over multiple chapters and then kill them off that makes me really horny actually thinking about it.
[Report This]Date: February 16 2020 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 13
Just read your answer, noo dont apologize hahaha. Your writing is incredible!! You are by far one if not the best writer on this site, period. I have to cry seeing all the bad stories on here, just short quikies with no plot, badly written, yikes. Your stories are like the Stephen King standard to that. I just saw a small number of minor, really really minor, mispellings here and there, like a missing 's' like at 'Oh yeah, they were good friend.' or a flipped character like jis instead of his or something. Dont you dare to apologize for that!! Not sure if you use Chrome, but you can activate its advanced spell check and then write the chapter for example in Google docs, and it is very easy to see little mispell errors with it in a minute or so. Dont you dare to say you missed up, you did NOT!!!
[Report This]Date: February 16 2020 3:05 PM Title: Chapter 13
I really enjoyed the idea of building some character up over several chapters and then let Ashley drop him in a very cruel way. I had the same idea actually before and wanted to ask this if it might be possible. The intro was really great to read even I disgree all those ideeas would have been very great and not boring at all. So I would totally would like to see Ashley turn on Toby like he actually had it in mind. I would love to see this happening to other characters too, but not the close ones like Phil and co.
[Report This]Date: February 16 2020 2:45 PM Title: Chapter 13
So amazingly long and so amaingly good... one of not the longest chaptest and I love it so much. The forplay was so thrilling, especially the entire idea of Ahsley manipulating someone into liking him and then... I honstly would love to see Ashely fulfill his first thoughts and turn Toby into something for the next chapters and totally betray him in the most cruel way. I would love to see Toby become some cruel stuff in relation to the football players Phil and no because of the nerd and the football players, maybe just becoming toilet paper for them to wipe their arse, or toilet, or condom for them and theit gf. Saw some little spelling mistakes here and there like his into jis or something, but nothing too bad. Incredible chapter!!
Author's Response:
Sorry about the misspells I gave up the accuracy for speed. I wanted to push this out as fast I could while trying to keep the errors as low as possible. Looks like messed up sorry.