I love how Ashely threats his playthings, I really do XD, he is so creative with them, and if we think on that a few moments, he also turn them into quite useful things (in that way they should be quite grateful with him XP)… for ideas, I imagine he can use some rude dude as his sexy underwear XD, or a couple of those as some cute pair of socks, or turning someone into a toering for Clair… but of course, Ashely seems to have more preference for more disposable things, so tampons or false nails could be a good fate for some guys (perhaps an entire gang of dudes XP)

Just read the chapter end notes. I think there is still lots of room for improving, for example making the plot even WAY more cruel and humiliated, like going really cruel. I liked the most cruel aprts you came up with the most. the example, where the turned guys keep their awareness instead of dying or fading away. a blow up doll would make that happen and I would love it. especially if it becames really used, dirty, and the boy ak the doll just becames numb inside, and is like please kill me, then being used again, or forgotten kept until next time usage. turning a guy into a escort would also be great, maybe do both. I think it would be horrible for him, to realize he had a vagina, and scream when he goes with his hand down and he had no penis anymore. especially he had just sex the other day with his girlfriend or something, and then, he would become on the acting part, giving blowjobs, which would be horrible for him I assume.

that was a nice idea with the fly. I would like to see more scat, but in a plausible manner. I find the idea of escort or blow up thingy realy interesting. I read a comments wish of turning someone into a cig and smoke that woule be fun too, but maybe alter it into a more interesting one. shrink a guy to particle size and put him into a cigarete and he would be burned to a poping crisp at one point.

Outstanding new chapter, I dont want to say as usual because it sounds ordinary, but when I see you havd written a new chapter, I just know it will be outstanding, and it was. How Ashely enjoys to multilate his victims is the best seriously, and plays it out all like a joke. To him it is just a joke and he finds it a mix of funny and stimulating, which is really kinky I like that. blowup doll sounds really kinky I would like that. Dont hassel, write when you have time, dont rush, and keep your high quality.

I have no idea how or where to start again because this chapter was absolutely EPIC, and SO much BETTER, even BETTER, than what I had in mind, when I wrote about this fly tf idea once in an older comment. You absolutely mastered it in every direction I thought it through actually, and you have no idea how happy I am right now!! Thank you so much of youd used this idea.

Please let me say, I think I told before how much I loved the Sammy story and how it was my favorite story of yours. But now, I think I can say for sure, the new favorite story of mine by you is this one. Sammys story is for sure now my 2nd fav one. It is so ironic, how I had seconds thoughts at first of this story, because Ashely is aware, instead of Sammy was totally unaware. Both have their own unique flavor. But I have to say, I just am right now in love, of how sadistic Ashely is, and how he plays with these victims. And I want to say a few words on this actually, because it reminds me actually of the movies SAW. And I am right now purely in love, with the concept you created in this chapter, of Ashely starting the tf of introducing to his newest victim, what he did, and what will be happening. It is literally in the style of SAW, “I want to play a little game”. I give you a fair chance to win the game, you can get back to normal / win your life, I give you a fair chance... well of course this is totally a lie, which makes it so fucking epic and hot. Because it is literally a no win scenario. And Ashely is literally getting a boner from this cruel game. I have to actually beg you, to use this concept again during future chapters, I already have some idea how actually, later more on this.

The pure epicness of this sadistic game of life or death actually is, that Ashely is playing a foul play, the transformed dont see coming. Of him literally throwing in stones for him, making his chances to win this game near zero chance. And I absolutely love this unfairness. The pure irony here is, that Ashely actually told or “warned” him. I give you two options, stay, and find out what I will do with you when I come back and lets have some “fun”, or leave this room. But I warn you, if you leave this room, I will threat and think of you just as an ordinary fly. This... was... fucking... EPIC. I cant even tell how awesome this was, and this talk of Ashely to his newest random victim, was actually already one of the best parts of the whole chapter.

Coming over the term random. Because this is like one of the best parts of this story now, and you totally have to hold on it. I love the idea, how literally everyone who isnt a friend of Ashely, or a teacher he likes, could literally become his next victim... and Ashely wouldnt give a shit about his fate. And... he gets a wank off about seeing him “lose” in his sadistic games. And I have to say, it is way better, when he turns boys into some nightmarish objects or body parts, then girls, and I hope you continue of this. It is so much more cruel in my opinion, especially of them being straight. I loved for example this little detail you mentioned, of Brandon thinking about his girlfriend and what she wants to do later.

See... details. This is another thing I want to talk about. You just have this incredible talent of throwing in details. Stuff so many bad authors forget. It is the little things in your story telling, which just make the whole chapter always great. It is a minor part, but it just adds to the compilation of things you are so great in. For example, how you made Brandon tell out of his perspective of a now fly, how the rooms and dorm structure looked like. I just loved this part, even if it was nothing special happeing there, I just loved it... should I go this door, or that, this door was closed, it may be the bathroom, better go this way, here the room was a kitchen, and stuff like that, it just... created a picture in my mind while reading, how the dorm looked like, and I just loved it. It actually reminded me a bit of books I read in the past by Michael Chrichton. The irony actually is, one of his last books before his death is the novel Micro, I have to read / listen to it again.

Coming back to the idea of SAW. I think it would be awesome to see Ashley do something like in this chapter again. Maybe he turns some random guys 2-3 into ants, and they are set free in the dorm, told how they had a chance to be turned back, just if they “somehow” would get in contact with some of Ashleys friends, or maybe tiny little baby cockroaches. It actually could end in some cruel crush scenarios, of the friends finding out, they had a nasty little bug infestation going on. Maybe not let food laying around all the time, right... and how Phil totally be like I fucking HATE bugs especially roaches, fucking little shit, where did it ran to. Ashely maybe be like Ill help looking.

I actually loved your idea, of Ashely giving Brandon the ability to still speak. I actually thought of, it would have been really ironic, if that was actually a lie, or lets say, a semi lie. I could have actually seen Ashely telling the truth about it, yes, he still was able to speak. But with speak, it meant bug language, and when Brandon spoke to humans other than Ashely, it would just sound like typical high pitched insect noise, hahaha

See these kind of unfairness is awesome, where Ashely could be at some point whispering to him, huh, oh didn't I mention it would be like that, or, I didn't lie, oops, didn't I tell about this, my bad.

I absolutely just fell in love of the part, where suddenly two hands slaped together in mid air, nearly killing Brandon, and to his pure horror, finding out, it was Ashely. I actually just loved this so much, of Ashely literally throwing stones in his way, making his chance to win this sadistic game near impossible. The same went for the part of Ashely mentioning, oh would you eat a bug? … pure... epic. Wasnt it for Ashely and him had spot the fly on the pizza... maybe Brandon had still a chance to win the game. Especially after Phil wanted to throw the pizza way into the trash. Obviously Brandon would had maybe a chance of getting free in the trash bin over night, and try again the next day.

And... bad luck. Pure fantastic little thing to play with. Like the boys wearing headphones, or the other being stoned. Just great. Then this irony... of Ashely be like “oh there is a fly around here” and Frank added to it, oh yeah, the little shit wouldnt get off the TV before. This all plays just together... against Brandon.

This kind of manipulation of the conversation of Ashely is fucking fantastic, and gave me such a thrill, mostly same as it gave to Ashley. I loved how he actually got a boner from this entire talk, and the things his friends said... and how his sadistic plan literally became more and more sadistic, played out by his unaware friends.

You totally have to use this now actually in every chapter hopefully. It is so much fun of Ashely manipulating his friends, and use them as unaware exterminators or players in his game. They wont get hurt of course, just these random guys, no one would care about. Some students no one would give a shit about, or lets say, Ashely wouldnt.

It would be actually ironic, if Ashely unintentionally turned some friend of Phil into some horrible thing, or some fanboy who had a crush on Phil, a bit more about this later of some ideas I would love to be used actually.

The way how Frank and Phil spoke... was so fucking hot, them laugh, joke, even Phil was a bit vulgar and cocky, so fucking hot. How they joked about the bug and Phil was like “that was a one-way trip”... actually I had the idea of them had told like, Ashely maybe throwing in a sentence like, what you think will happen to the fly? And Phil just with a cocky smirk be like “shit dude”, huh, what you mean? “Well I told ya it was on a one-way trip. Next step for it my ass to kiss the toilet tomorrow.” and Frank just gag with a sad expression. Talk like this would for sure give Ashely again another boner thrill. Maybe you could actually use a talk like this in a cruel sadistic TF, which I would love to see honestly, of some very unlucky student becomes Phils anus. And Ashely plays out some conversation like bringing up a talk about how the toilet needs to be cleaned again, and Phil asnwering like, whoops my bad, I have really soft shits lately, Frank be like thats fucking disgusting one, maybe is eating something and is like, hey I'm trying to eat here. Phil be like, what, it's just I eat lots of fiber and all, giving really creamy shits you know whispering into Franks ear with a smirk, which gags on his spoon or drink poking out some drink on the table, Phil just laughing. And this conversation was of course be able to be hearn from the poor new anus of Phils in his pants. I even had this cruel idea, made of your addition to this chapter... how Ashely could always change things he wants during a TF. What if he warps into the tfed mind of the anus, and speaks to him, yes I can hear you, and after some talk, hes like, fine I will help you so you want need to whine anymore. I will change you so I cant hear you anymore, from one on... youll just be his anus, and no one, not even me would ever be able to hear you talk again. Enjoy your next meal... or should I say, next thrown up meal.

The burp parts of Phil were amazing, and how Frank got really sick of the talk.... even ran to the bathroom, totally amazing. And how it all gave Ashely a boner he tried to hide in his boxers...

The part where one of the flys leg was already melted away... was so awesome. How he sobbed and wished for someone to hear him … and how he actually got an answer... in the form of the stomach just gurgle around him, LOL.

I loved the after talk so much, of Ashely literally enjoying it to the bone, or should I say boner... he even played and manipulated the conversation after the fly was swallowed, and I thought of, how cruel it would be, if Brandon actually was able to hear the conversation outside happening.

The whole time Frank was like this is disgusting, and Phil just be like, what, it's just more protein, fair enough. Dude you cant be serious... this conversation was my favorite. It is so cruel if you think about Brandon hearing them talk about his fate... and what was about to happen to him.

And the best and most irony? The most cruel thing? His life was sealed for a single can of soda. LOL! He was literally sold for a can of soda, worth maybe $1. His life was sold away for $1... this was the best part of the entire chapter.

And this is totally the best chapter so far. Close near on the same level as the previous.

I could literally go on like this for some more time, and pick little parts out and tell you how great they were. But I hope you got an understanding of the most important things I wanted to tell... and you just have to continue like this, because... it is just perfect like it is. Ashely is perfect, and I love Phil already so much too, of him be the typical straight guy, and him also be the quarter back of the football team, making him already hot.

I have to say I am not a fan of this pet teacher concept and Ashely has a crush on his male math teacher, but I guess you have a little kink for it so why not, ha.

Ugh this talk is just SO good, the wait for me from Ashely... lol, I could just go on forever picking out parts I loved SO MUCH.

Coming to a closer, I want to end this review with a few tf concepts I would totally love to see as standalone chapters:

baby cockroaches tf

Phils anus tf, or Ashelys, whats better? Could fit actually if it was Ashelys, that hes like fine I will help you... help us both, because to be honest, I find it wear if I can hear my anus talk to me. So I will change you into that I wont be able to hear you anymore. Enjoy your stay, you liked my ass you said before, so I'm happy to fulfill your wish. Sorry to tell you this, but I had really creamy shits lately, meh, better out than in I guess, right. Hey maybe it tastes like chocolate syrup, too bad you cant tell me about it anymore though.

Boxershort tf, and some really cruel one, of them end with cum stains on the room under ones bed, mostly Phils

female blow up doll of course, and it also ends really cruel, used with cum in its mouth and vagina, shared maybe on a party

Ashely gifts Phil a “flesh light”, and the flesh light is used after a week or two like I wrote before in a comment, ending as being used to take a shit into it, because the dorm toilet is clocked, and Phil fills it to its rim with shit, and throws it in the trash, sealed with toilet paper

mind control tf into a hooker, and the pure straight boy would be the same in his head, but cant control his body, he would literally see and hear through his eyes and ears, the boys talk cheap about him, and he would scream in his mind, and no one would hear him, Ashely though would play with this, whisper into him of course, maybe on this party, of Phil be like chill dude, shes just a low iq hooker, she can give you a blowjob if you want, maybe the hooker cant even understand English properly, so it looks to the outside people, and also had a really low IQ... which was all fake of course, and part of the MC

someone ends as a bacteria inside ones large intestine or rectum, cursed to live in there as a ass bacterium

someone ends as/inside a giant cum stain, maybe shrunk to the size of a amoeba inside it

I actually had this idea of Ashely shrinking someone to microscopic size, like the size of a dust particle, and giving him a chance to win the game, if he could get to a specific point in the room, or send a signal through a key stroke of a PC keyboard. The poor guy would learn too late it was impossible of his size to use the keys though. Or turning someone into a mite and placing him in his roommates boxers. Or gluing them in place in it.

Thanks for reading. THANKs a billion times for writing. You made my day with this chapter.