[Report This]Date: April 25 2018 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 2
drawing tf I havent seen before, just cool idea at all, liked it a LOT
[Report This]Date: March 23 2018 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 2
rly good ideas and the last part was already dark with the drawing I found that really good
[Report This]Date: March 16 2018 10:19 PM Title: Chapter 2
damn good chapter 2, enjoying it so far a lot
[Report This]Date: March 12 2018 11:16 PM Title: Chapter 2
good chapter 2, very good tf compilation, the rubber idea was my favorite of them, eradicated out of existence literally got a new meaning.
[Report This]Date: March 12 2018 5:02 PM Title: Chapter 2
Thank you! The idea with the chewing gum is great. Lol I could see the chewing gum gets accidentally swallowed by accident, like a slap on one gues back, hey budy, whats up *gulp*. Whey the sore face? Meh... doesnt matter. I enjoy giving reviews :) Actually I would love them all, fly tf, toilet paper tf, but even more, like tight boxershorts tf, condom tf, flesh light gift for a budy, but also this girl blow up sex doll idea for it being used by the football team. But also one becoming the anus of one of the roomates, that would be like hell, and them all not dying, they all stay forever the object they become. And for the fly tf, what if one of the roomates had a gold fish in hs room, and they feed the half mangled fly to it, and the other fly becomes a smear on a rolled up newspaper. Mostly them playing xbox, and eating, and talk and one of them is totally annoyed and is like I ... fucking... hate.. flys. After the "flys" tried to get in contact with them a few times, but they ignored the faint buzzing noise near the ears a few times with a swat in the air.
[Report This]Date: March 12 2018 3:30 AM Title: Chapter 2
WOW , the whole story is amazing, and that ending with the eraser was incredible.
[Report This]Date: March 12 2018 12:48 AM Title: Chapter 2
Another great chapter, the part with the girl I was a bit worried about ha, I was like no is he now a girl or and then pheww, false alarm. I actually thought about the girl then a bit a she ly, is that by accident? Because, Ashely is like a strange or unique and rare name, I havent heared it before, for a boy. I enjoyed all the little short transformation parts, and the ending was the best of them actually.
[Report This]Date: March 11 2018 11:54 PM Title: Chapter 2
!!! Seriously... I liked the first half of the chapter, how you made a flip in time, and told how he got his power, and how you first had no idea bout it. The part with the ant was soo good, wish somehow he would have stayed unaware about his powers, but I also like it now he does know, I will tell in a bit why. I loved how you said he hated every kind of insect, that could be used later lol. Maybe if he turns some bullies into pesky tiny flys, brings them back, and his roommates exterminatem them with a rolled up magazine, and one ends eaten by a gold fish, or bird, or whatever. The part with his parentes died in a car accident was really upset to read. Here comes the reasn why it is also awesome to think about he is awre. I love how he enjoyes it more and more and literally now is at this point, where when he turned someone into an object, he wont ever turn them back anymore, and to him they arent humans anymore. So awesome. The part with the pie accident was so funny, just one bite, one more, oops all gone, lol. And the cinema one, how he lied, soo awesome, and how she was like youre the best friend ever. So mean!!
And now I have to totally tell you, youre just an incredible author. Why? Dude.. this idea? With he turns someone... into a drawing on a paper in class, in his notebook? That is one of the most original ideas I ever read in an transformation story. I think I never read anywhere before someone did this. Normally people just become objects, but here, this guy literally became a drawing ON a paper... this... is so fucked up and awesome. It adds so many cruel possibilites. Like you did with the eraser... or adding new things to the drawing... or... overdraw it. !!! LOL! Too bad this part was so short. I would love to see that again. And it actually even made me think, what if he turns someone into a girly poster for his roomates, which he would use as a masturbate material to look at. Or imagine someone becomes a little drawn person on a paper, and he rubs the paper part into a little ball he uses to slime up in his mouth and spit in class at someone through a straw.
Tell you what I think of this story? Endless cruel possibilities. I am so happy you decided to write it. And this notebook idea is awesome. Remindes me somehow of the anime Death Note.
Author's Response:
So I was going to have Ashely chewing gum and wrap Erick up in the sticky substance and throw him away but thought of another use for the gum TF in the another chapter, maybe. I'm glad you are enjoying the story so far. Like reading your reviews, and I do plan on doing a TF with roommates unaware but not sure if flies, toilet paper, or something elser. I'll thimk of something. I look forward to your reivews.