Reviewer: gtsfan91 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 12 2018 12:59 AM Title: Irony can cruel sometimes (F/m)

oh my god! incredible! I was always a huge fan of death by booty. you sir are a hero! please I beg you write more!! I always wished death by booty was continued. I love cruel plots and dark irony and toilet jokes. I love the character literally go through hell and vomit, and stuck to some ass slime, tries to stand up but lands on his face again and then maybe even fall onto a shit blob with his face, rockeing it up his mouth and he throws up. Stuff like that. Sadly you didnt do so well of the horror in my oppinion, of the character just soo easily gave up and was like eh I want to die, or in the rectum? You should totally make him be like sobbing mommy ple I , then adding some horrible gurgling noise, wh wha-whwats happening? Turning around in slow, then OH GO OH GOD NOO, and seeing a gigantic slimy creamy turd sliding into the rectum. See, this kind of ironic writing would be soo hot. Hope you can somehow adapt this style. Then also shrinking the characters to tiny sizes like dust particle, or make farts shrink them more, or them become embedded into a dingle berry, or or or, So many awesome stuff to think about. I also liked the first chapter with male, would like to see more unaware, maybe some roommate plots in college or high school, with some boy inding in an ass of a skinny boy, who is sitting in class and having an annoying itch in his arse. And some very cruel and graphic chapters, where creamy turds literally slowmy are pressed into the guys face and up his throat, and stuff like that. Shit overolling, and so on.

Author's Response:

I appreciate the praise. But more important criticism. I'll take your words into mind when writing next. I agree this series needs a better horror feeling. Thanks for taking your time to give me some feedback, Have a nice day! ;)