Date: March 17 2018 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Taking a Fall
Hopefully Hannah keeps her underfoot all day and night! Even when she goes to bed she stuffs her in a sock she’s wearing so Erin can never escape her feet! All the while Erin is wondering why this happened to her and why everyone wants her underfoot
Date: March 17 2018 12:26 PM Title: Chapter 5 - The Deal
Love this story! Just something about it, youre writing style just grabs the reader.
This freaking bus, lol, everyone is twisted on it.
Yeah, was kind of hoping the same, that Keri would have just got up and left with her little occupant but now that Hannah is going to get another crack at her AND Keri gets to take her when she wants too, I cant wait!
I think a direction this story may go, since poor Abbey lost out on the object of her affection and who was longing for her before anyone else ever was, snatches her prized possession at a later date. Maybe as an ending ;)
Whatever happens, I hope Erin doesnt ever begin to enjoy what is happening to her, just sucks all the fun out of it! IMO
Date: March 16 2018 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 5 - The Deal
Well, I love where this is going. Kids are generally crueller than adults, so now that Hannah is getting her, and her mother approves, it looks like poor Erin is going to be having a very hard, and hopefully humiliating time.
Date: March 14 2018 4:43 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Taking a Fall
Sorry for the extended review :P (as if the wall below wasn't enough!) but since you said you'd like to hear feedback on what we'd like to see in future chapters. I think it'd be interesting if Erin were to submit to one of her captors, possibly going as far as falling for them (maybe someone of Keri's or Hannah's personality). I can see this as being a long story with endless possibilities, so this would take place much later on ^_^ Right now i'm really looking forward to the ride inside Keri's shoe & what she has in store for poor little Erin :D
Date: March 14 2018 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Taking a Fall
I actually read this story same day you posted it (late Feb i think) and meant to sign up and leave a review then. I love your writing style, got something unique and charming about it. I was blown away the minute i got to the part in which Hannah silently ordered Erin to get inside her flat, so confident! <3 probably she thought it's a no-brainer for someone of Erin's size and lowered status ha. And btw to me this is easily one the highlights of your story, something i'd encourage you to stay with throughout the chapters. I mean the depth with which the character's mindset is described as they carry out their actions. Hannah's already got a fan outta me as far as that's concerned haha, love her strong sense of entitlement and cheekiness. But i like Abbey too, i feel she's got more edge to her than shown so far, bit lovey-dovey type but also very possessive and would not take kindly to being denied. She's like Hannah in some ways, tho driven by different motives.
Date: March 07 2018 11:03 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Unaware Jealousy
Oh damn, I love them all! Im sure it will be great whomever gets to keep Erin.
Love this story! The action and discrptions is great as is the personality of each girl that wants Erin.
Date: March 03 2018 12:16 AM Title: Chapter 3 - An Artist and a Dancer
Aw i thought that the amount of people who said Hannah would’ve guaranteed that Erin would be going home with her /:
The bus ride section isn't over just yet. Have faith!
Date: March 02 2018 8:35 PM Title: Chapter 3 - An Artist and a Dancer
Yes, I changed my mind, Abbey can have her! LOL
With Hannah it would be foot fun but Abbey is older and can do sooo much more *weg*
Or, maybe they strike up a friendship and share her. Best of both worlds.
Loving this story!
Date: March 02 2018 6:35 PM Title: Chapter 3 - An Artist and a Dancer
Phenomenal first few chapters! Rarely am I left really begging for another! Keep up the great work! I also agree with a previous reply, I don't see how a mothers work heels couldn't come into play ;). Rooting for Hannah and can't for what's to come!
Date: March 02 2018 12:07 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Taking a Fall
Needed to leave a review. I’m absolutely blown away by this story. The writing is phenomenal and the scenery is incredibly believable. A bus where people mind their own business, ignoring things around them to the point a woman vanishing doesn’t catch their eye. Obviously Abby noticed, but she was fixated on her. Still, love the set-up and am very excited to see where you taken this next.
Date: March 01 2018 10:50 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Taking a Fall
I think the fact that everyone sees Erin and wants her underfoot or as a pet is hot. I guess reality may have changed where anyone who sees her doesn’t wanna help her and sees her as a plaything? Would love an author reply if I’m right about that :)
Well, only two people have seen her so far, so I'm not sure that theory holds up just yet :D And Abbey was inspired by what she was already seeing...so that girl was already pining for her and it was an easy progression. I wonder if anyone else should see her to put that to the test? :o