[Report This]Date: March 08 2019 6:20 PM Title: Chapter 41
Yes! Love how you introduced Mrs. Carson, or who I should call Janet now. Love the name. Not too common, but it’s a name I can easily picture a neighborhood sexy mom’s name to be. Good choice.
I was kinda expecting Janet to finish her yoga and then interact with the laundry this chapter. Part of was wondering when the yoga scene was going to end, because it felt a little longer than I’m used to. Usually, I love these types of interactions, but I guess I was ready for her next activity too soon.
Also, I think Chris has been at this tiny size for too long now. He hasn’t grown recently which seems kinda odd. I can’t wait for him to be at least 1 inch tall, and even better 2-3 inches!
My suggestion was at 2 ft tall, so that might be a long while until then. But for now, I will enjoy this tiny Chris to interact with Janet and Rachel.
I think someone else made the idea of Chris getting stuck to Janet’s underwear and she puts them on with him inside them. I actually like that idea.
I can see Chris getting stuck to the underside of Janet’s foot next chapter. She then goes to her kinky large master bedroom where the fun happens. There, she lies down on the bed, massaging her feet with her hands, scraping Chris off her food and he falls onto the bed. Janet then stands up and takes off her clothes surprising Chris. Her clothes fall to the floor and she walks to nightstand and opens the top drawer which Chris cannot see into. She takes out an object that looks like a male action figure. Chris wonders why she has an action figure and notices it’s not your average action figure.
This action figure is naked and has an unusually large penis sticking out erect. Chris looks at his own member in comparison and feels embraced that a toy has a bigger dick that he has. He watches Janet begin licking the toy all over, and sometimes she closes her lips around his dick and Chris watches her hum in joy. She then licks the head of the toy and she says “time for the fun part”.
Janet then hops on the bed, nearly landing on Chris, with her legs on either side of him. Chris is too stunned to move anywhere as her magnificent body grabs his attention. She takes the male doll and places it between her legs, just a little ways from Chris. Chris watches as her hands take the doll and drags it closer to her vagina, rubbing her thighs in the process. As the doll reaches her vagina, Chris predicts that she will run the doll around to achieve and orgasm. Instead, what he saw surprised him. Janet brought the doll to her pussy and easily slid the doll inside, headfirst, much to Chris’s amazement.
He watches her pussy swallow the doll and also a bit of her finger as she pushed it inside her. When she took her finger out, her vagina made suction pop noise as it closed up, trapping the poor doll inside.
“Ah, much better” Janet sighs as she then got off the bed and began putting her clothes on as if nothing as changed. Chris, still in shock, watches as Janet puts on her underwear and sees that there is no sign of the doll as tight underwear hugs her pussy. Janet then puts on the rest of her clothes and Chris watches her walk out leaving him wondering if his fate will be similar to that doll.
I got excited while writing this piece and I would love to see Janet do something crazy sexy to mess with Chris. She could easily be my favorite character. I hope she is that naughty woman I wished her to be. We can only wait to find out.
I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Sometimes I have trouble finding names for my characters, and Rachel’s mother was no different. I’m glad you like the name I finally settled on, and hope you also liked the description of her figure and outfit.
I actually cut the chapter short because of how long I felt it was getting, but I hope you enjoyed it nonetheless.
Believe it or not, you’re suggestion actually helps me solve a problem I was having with an upcoming chapter, but I won’t say how just yet....and I picture the bed scene going just a little differently 😉
Date: March 04 2019 5:44 PM Title: Chapter 40
I love this story so much! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you, I will!
Date: March 01 2019 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 40
Nice chapter. Is it bad that I hope Chris goes through the washer and dryer, only to be stuck to someone elses (like Rachel's mom, or a visiting friend) under garments right before they use them? Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Well, as always, you’ve got some good ideas. You’ll just have to wait and see what comes.
[Report This]Date: March 01 2019 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 40
This chapter felt long, which is awesome. The word count seems the same, but it took more time for me to read. Maybe my reading skills got worse.
With more fun chapters coming up, I would love to see more lengthy chapters paired up with the fun.
Speaking of fun. I hope this story is going where I think it’s going. Rachel taking pile of clothes to laundry room and Mrs. Carson takes over after noticing how sad Rachel is. Mrs. Carson inspects her daughter’s clothing and laundry just out of curiosity. She opens up the towel and sees a brown spot in the middle, with the clear white outline of what appears to be a tiny human. It looks similar to a crime scene where chalk outlines where a dead body was.
Meanwhile Chris heard the voice of Mrs. Carson humming as she did the laundry. Not wanting to be caught in her daughter’s laundry, he waited for the towel to open up and he managed to slide toward the floor without her noticing.
Chris looks around and notices how small the laundry room is and the only escape is behind Mrs. Carson. At what a sight she is. No wonder why he likes Rachel so much. She got her looks from her mother who is currently wearing some yoga pants and tight sleeveless shirt revealing her sexy curves. While Rachel was definitely cute, her mom has a body to die for, especially with that hourglass figuere. Chris was tempted to reveal himself to her just now. “Not yet” he tells himself.
With the giantess in the way, he slowly approaches her feet and makes a plan to climb her foot. He arrives and can smell the aroma rising from her feet. Much stronger than Rachel’s but not as bad as Shannon’s. Chris climbs on and waits.
Mrs. Carson finished her and Rachel’s laundry and walks out without noticing the tiny Chris on her foot. Chris hangs on for dear life hoping to not get noticed. The thrill of riding her foot and the danger of falling out is turning Chris on. All of a sudden, he body begins to grow. “No, no, no! Not now!” Chris exclaims, worried that Mrs. Carson would notice.
Mrs. Carson heads back to her favorite reading chair and sits down. She crosses her legs and her right foot is dangling, the one Chris is on. He begins feeling dizzy and hears Mrs. Carson say “alright chapter 1.” Chris knew this would last a while. A fall from this height might break something, so his only option is to climb Mrs. Carson. He looks up toward the rest of her magnificent body and begins his ascent...
Stay tuned for more!
Author's Response: Be careful, or you might just wind up writing this story for me.😉
Believe it or not, I was worried this chapter might be too short, but it had a lot of action packed into it. I really hope you don’t mind the long string of scenarios; someone else harkened it to “spaghetti”. And, the action’s going to be nonstop for a bit. So buckle up and enjoy the read!
Date: February 25 2019 12:37 AM Title: Part I—Chapter 1
Congrats on 100 reviews!
Author's Response: 😂 Congratulations, you win! I was wondering who was going to submit review #100.
[Report This]Date: February 17 2019 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 39
Happy (almost) one year anniversary of this story! I wanna congratulate you on your creativity and perseverance of a story this good a year later. Without a doubt the BEST STORY on this site. Even when this eventually ends (and after a shed a tear) , I hope you continue to write and make as good stories as this. 10/10
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words and you’re patronage! I’m really glad you appreciate my hard work. This has been quite the project, so yes, I will be quite happy when it’s all done! As I’ve said, this was my first story, but it definitely won’t be my last: I have several short stories, novellas, and novels that I want to work on in the future, along with a couple commissions I need to get to, so stay tuned!
[Report This]Date: February 17 2019 4:25 PM Title: Chapter 39
Great chapter I didn’t expect to like Rachel as much as I do but she’s great. The ending was a nice tease and if I may request if Chris is still in her butt by the end of the shower could she put on a thong with him still in her butt. Just a suggestion can’t wait for what happens next
Author's Response: I’m glad that you’ve warmed up to Rachel; I wasn’t sure if the readers would take to her. While I do like your suggestion, Rachel really isn’t the thong type of girl, that’s more a “Shannon” type of garment.
Anyway, thanks for the suggestion; it certainly gives food for thought with other characters.
[Report This]Date: February 17 2019 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 39
Shrinker82, you sly devil, haha. When you said “wet and steamy” chapter, I was expecting something highly erotic, but the wet and steamy part was because Rachel was in the shower which was wet and steamy. Clever advertising. Lol.
Sure, we got a sample of ass, but that was quite a shorter scene than I’m used to you writing.
By the way, I’m confused about Chris’s current location. Last we see of him is Rachel scrubbing Chris into her ass and then she takes her hand out and washes it. Since Chris is super small, she could have washed him out after rubbing her ass with him. I’m guessing you implied that Chris is stuck in her ass, but there is no guarantee. We just see what Rachel does and we can’t tell where Chris is. I think a sentence about Chris being trapped in her ass would be awesome.
and then Rachel’s hand returns to clean her crack, forcing Chris even deeper between her cheeks. Chris sees the hand returning, thinking it’s a rescue attempt. Maybe she felt him. However, her hand pushes him further inside and soon it withdraws, leaving him inside. Chris watches it leave his field of vision and soon his world darkens as her butt swallows him up.
I can’t wait for that conversation with Rachel and Mrs. Carson. Maybe Chris will fall out and end up in some motherly, yet naughty hands.
I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I’ll say this for you, TomSpeedy, you definitely get me better than any other reader. The chapter description was meant to ironic, so thanks for getting my sense of humor. 😜
As for as your confusion, that’s the point. I left Chris’s fate up in the air, not so much for the cliffhanger, but to leave it open for speculation, so that’s why I didn’t elude to where he was at the end; however, I think you’ve got a pretty good idea about what’s coming next, but that’s all I’ll say for now.
As always, thanks for your input, and thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: February 17 2019 12:08 PM Title: Chapter 39
I have real trouble rating this stroy. Your writing style is compelling and descriptive - qualities that make your world really immersive. However...
In my eyes your story resembles a spaghetti; it goes on and on, a collection of highly repetitive and lenghty scenarios. Obviously, the details vary but the foundation remains almost unchanged. The unaware nature of Chris's mishappenings combined with the aforementioned results in build-up of frustration (unfortunately, not only Chris's).
Do not get me wrong, there are many things done right. Main protagonist's complicated relationship with Shannon and less complicated but no less interesting relashions with other women are what still draws me to new chapters. For a story that long and as well-written as this one I would just expect more character development and a truly engaging plot.
Story: 6/10
Form: 8/10
Author's Response: First off, I want to tell you how much I appreciate your honesty regarding your rating and review; Constructive feedback is always the most informative and only a few of my reviews offer that, so thanks for your input.
I have said, in response to my other reviews, that i really didn’t expect this story to be as long as it is turning out to be. What started as a small project turned into a fricken’ novel. Sure, I had a lot of details and scenarios that I wanted to go through— sort of a “little something for everyone” type of read— that could be bookmarked and revisited, but I hadn’t expected the project to be this massive. My own fault though.
Not to sound conceited, but I feel that over the course of this story my writing skills have vastly improved. You can probably tell the difference form the last few chapters compared from the first few chapters. Obviously, if I had it to do over again, I would have hashed out the characters better and changed some things around, but hindsight’s 20/20.
Above all else, however, I wanted the entire story to convey Chris’s frustration, helplessness, and hopelessness throughout, and for the reader to experience those same emotions and empathize with him, but once again, the length of the story does tend to provide a repetitive nature to my scenarios. I guess I just want to please too many people. But, I can assure you that in the future, my stories probably won’t be this long, and any that are will be have a lot more variety, especially between aware and unaware scenarios.
Thanks for your honesty and feedback, and thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: February 17 2019 9:17 AM Title: Chapter 39
Loved the chapter, can't wan't to see the continuation! Been enjoying the story from the beginning!
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading!
Date: February 12 2019 9:24 AM Title: Chapter 13
U know... you v written it very gooood! keep going
your the best writer i think
noticing details are incredible in your notes! thanx for your writing
Author's Response: Well, I’m glad you’re enjoying it. Thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: February 05 2019 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 38
Lol, the whole dog perspective was.... well I have no idea. It was unique, that’s for sure. I don’t think I ever would have wrote about what a dog things of a little guy.
Glad to see Chris get a glimpse of giantess Mrs. Carson in yoga pants. Wish he had more time to admire her, haha.
“Tumbled to his death”? That means he died. And I don’t think you meant that. Maybe “tumbled down below” “tumbled to his doom” “tumbled into dangerous waters” Anything that shows danger, but not death.
I like how you involve feet with Rachel. To me, this can only mean you are saving the other juicy parts with another giantess and I think I know who will that be. :)
Well, I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: 1) As I said, this part of the story deals with the perceptions of many different characters as the events play out, which, in this case, includes dogs.
2) I know you only caught a glimpse of Mrs. Carson, but trust me, you’ll see more of her later.
3) OK, maybe I could’ve used different wording, but I didn’t want to spend too much time wording a single sentence. Maybe once I’m all done, I’ll go back and proofread the whole story.
4) I have said that Rachel is serving a very special purpose in this story, and it’s not just to be a teenaged giantess, though that comes with the territory.
I hope you like how the story turns out. Thanks for reading!
Date: February 04 2019 5:38 PM Title: Chapter 38
Is this the end? If not, I'm really enjoying this turn of events hope more stuff happens with Rachel.
Author's Response: Well, all I can say is that there’s still lots of story left, but you’ll definitely see lots more of Rachel and Sue Ann before it’s all over.
Date: February 04 2019 11:21 AM Title: Chapter 38
Nice chapter. Hope he doesn't actually die. But is it bad that I hope Chris gets sucked down the drain, but still lives. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Well, Chris is quite the survivor, so anything’s possible.
Date: January 28 2019 6:17 PM Title: Chapter 37
This is one of my favorite series on this site. Even when this amazing stoy finishes, I hope you continue the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you for your readership. I have several more stories in the works, including several more novellas and short stories. If you haven’t seen it already, check out my short story “Honey, Don’t Squish Me!” also published on this site. Also, I am accepting commissions, so if you have any custom requests, feel free to contact me.
[Report This]Date: January 28 2019 2:11 PM Title: Chapter 37
I’m really happy to see where this story is going! Chris is finally at Rachel’s house while tiny!
Now Chris is forced to take shelter in her house because that’s where she left him.
I’m also glad you made this scene unaware. Usually I’m a big “aware” fan, but I think I like it when Rachel does the unaware stuff. Therefore, we can save the aware moments with her mother. :)
I’m also curious if Chris has grown recently. Is he still half an inch tall? Or is he taller? Would love to see him reach around 2 inches around Mrs. Carson. But if he meets her earlier, that could also be fun too.
Lol, who walks barefoot to their neighbors house? I understand that Rachel could have been anxious to see Chris, so she forgot, but I think it’s funny. Inside her house, I can see Rachel walking barefoot much more often.
Perhaps, Chris might also get a glimpse of Mrs. Carson as a giantess for the first time. I would love to see his reaction.
I’m so excited! I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I can honestly tell you that this was where the story was heading since the beginning, it just took a while to get there. There are several things that are going to happen over the next few chapters, but that’s all I’ll say for now.
Chris is still only around an 1/8th of an inch tall. This is smaller than you may expect, but it facilitates certain unaware interactions and renders calling for help useless.
If I didn’t paint the environment properly, Rachel’s and Chris’s houses are situated so that their backyards are actually adjoining, so that’s why Rachel simply walked over barefoot, it was grass the whole way. Rachel’s backyard also has a small fenced in area for her dog, Chloe, to run around in.
As far as what’s going to happen in Rachel’s home, some things will be expected, but others unexpected, so don’t be too disappointed if things don’t go exactly how you plan.
As always, thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: January 24 2019 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 36
My goodness, Shrinker 82. You have certainly improved as a writer since you started this story and the biggest difference is how much detail you add to each chapter in addition to the actual plot.
When Chris was outside, you mentioned that he looked up at the sky, thankful that there was no rain. That is a very good point, and the average writer wouldn’t mention such a detail that could deeply affect the story. Rain for tiny Chris would be deadly, especially at this size.
I also, love the “Bug’s life” movie reference with the bird and the beetle. In Bug’s life, the bird saves the day and in this story, the bird saves Chris’s life as well. I loved that movie, and I’m glad you mentioned that.
This chapter felt much longer than usual, and I noticed you put that in your chapter notes, so I’m excited that this just the first part of 2. I’m a big fan of authors who post long chapters, so that way I don’t just breeze though them. And since I really enjoy your story, I want to read more.
I think this is the most we saw of Sue Ann in the whole story, haha. I wonder what she was thinking as she left Rachel at the park. I doubt any giantess ideas came to her head, because in reality, the thought of someone shrinking seems comical.
Glad we also got to see Mrs. Carson get some dialogue as well. I love how you described her. A busy mom with lots of work, and sounds like she is in need of a stress reliever, and I think I know who (not what) would be the best solution.
When you mentioned that she sent Rachel out to the park, I thought Chris would just wander inside their house while Mrs. Carson was home alone. Perfect time to give her company. But then again, I would be getting ahead of my self.
In addition, I like how you had Mrs. Carson tell Rachel to go find a boy to play with. I feel like most mothers would be more cautious to just let her teenage daughter go out to find a boy, but I get the sense that Mrs. Carson isn’t your typical mother and she would love to see Rachel bring home a young teen boy so Mrs. Carson could teach him some manners before letting him hang out with her daughter. Something tells me that Mrs. Carson wants a young man to fool with. Haha. She gives me a naughty vibe, I love it!
One other thing I noticed was that Shannon mentioned that the potion will start wearing off around Friday, which is also the same day that Rachel and her mom plan on going to the movies. It can’t be simply a coincidence that Friday was mentioned twice in this chapter, right? Lol. I think I see some foreshadowing going on.
Whew! Story wise, I love how so much happened in this chapter. Lots to talk about and with so many characters. Can’t wait for the weekend chapter update!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, TomSpeedy! I was really worried the readers wouldn’t like this chapter due to the lack of any juicy encounters, but it seems to have gotten several positive reviews, so I won’t be so apprehensive if I do any more like this.
As I said way back when I started, Sue Ann is going to start having a much larger roll in the latter half of the story, as well as Rachel. Mrs. Carson will also play a role. There is a very specific way that the events of this story are going to unfold, but remember, if the story doesn’t quite go in the direction you’re expecting, there’s always the alternative story arcs. Heck, even I didn’t expect the story to go the way it’s going; it just sort of evolved over time.
I will say that you’re right about one thing: there was some foreshadowing in this chapter but that’s all I’ll say for now. This story has evolved to something much larger than anything I had originally imagined. What started as a simple outlet has become so much more. This definitely won’t be the last of my stories!
Date: January 23 2019 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 36
I love the super tiny 1/8 inch size, but I can't wait for some bare foot interaction at that size. Now that he has escaped the beetle, I'm sure hoping Shannon finds him soon for some additional playtime! Also still hoping Shannon finds a way to grow into a real giantess when Chris finally grows back!
Author's Response: Oh, there’ll be plenty of juicy interactions with Chris at this size, and Shannon isn’t going to give up looking so easily. She won’t rest until she finds him!
[Report This]Date: January 23 2019 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 36
Great chapter!
I liked all of the different concurrent plot developments. But I really hope that Shannon gets what's coming by the time this is over. I guess I just really dislike her, or at least how she treats Chris, since the problems are almost always caused by her even if she still tries to blame him.
But I'm sure you're intending to write her that way, so you're doing a good job.
Hopefully Sue Ann actually manages to save Chris.
Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thanks! As I said previously, part II of this story is going to have more chapters like this, but there will be plenty of time focusing on Chris’s predicaments as the story progresses. This is also the point when you start seeing Shannon’s true colors, as well as the effects she has on other characters besides Chris.
I know that everyone just loves getting to the good stuff with stories like this, but I really like to set up and develop my plots, and sometimes it takes longer than expected; it’s just how I write. I like details in my stories, and I think it makes for a better and more realistic reading experience.
Date: January 12 2019 12:07 AM Title: Part I—Chapter 1
Hmm. As far as suggestions go, I think the 2 ft tall Chris chapter with Mrs. Carson is still in queue to be uploaded. But due to Chris’s size at the moment, it will take a lot of chapters until that moment.
So in the meantime, maybe a 2 to 3 inch tall Chris in the hands of Noreen or Mrs. Carson would be great. They would be aware of him, and play with him. I think it’s easier with Mrs. Carson to be the sexy, naughty character since she is new, and Noreen seems kinda caring despite how much I badly want her to be naughty.
I guess I will stick with Mrs. Carson since I can literally dream up the sexiest and naughtiest woman out there and imagine it to be her. It was kinda what I was thinking of when I wrote that 2 ft tall suggestion earlier.
I could see Mrs. Carson take the 3 inch Chris and tape him to the inside front of her panties. Then she wears them while Chris is inside. She can tease him before hand, saying that Chris is a perverted, naughty boy that deserves to be punished. She can also say that he will spend the entire day trapped tightly against her. She can feel him squirming his precious little body into her, sending jolts of pleasure through her body. Stuff like that. Then she can go about her day while Chris is trapped inside. Shopping, going to work, crossing her legs, driving the car, watching a long movie, going to the bathroom, etc.
As for Noreen, I love how you used Chris as her gym toy. I could see her using him to train her pussy muscles. I know it sounds bizarre, but I think Chris being used in her workouts is kinda hot.
Noreen can do splits on top of him. She can do leg clamps, yoga poses, jogging, etc.
I can’t wait to meet Mrs. Carson soon. Getting excited just writing suggestions about her.
Author's Response: Alright, some good reminders and suggestions! Well, as long as they don’t interfere with the main plot lines, I think we can work something into the remainder of the story; But even if I can’t, I’ve got some great ideas for alternative story arcs. I’d like to get in a few more chapters before I post the next reader challenge so I have several jumping off points with the remaining characters. Thanks for your input!