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Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 27 2018 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 33

Wait. Chris doesn’t end up with Noreen? I thought we would have a different ending with Noreen this time. This is almost the same thing last time. Lol. Noreen believes Chris is tiny, and then Shannon convinces her it’s not real. Deja vu.

I’m curious as to where this story is headed again because I thought this Noreen thing was the start of something big, but she leaves again.

I liked how Noreen wanted to explore the house and all, but I wished she actually carried it out and caught Shannon. All she had to do was see Chris’s room. With that level of determination, I find it hard to believe that Noreen all of a sudden second guessed herself.

Nonetheless, this was a good chapter. It’s been a while, so I assume you had some restful holiday relaxation and are ready to make chapters more often. This story is great and I want to read more.

For the readers challenge. I knew my choice wasn’t going to get picked. Like I said before, everyone chooses the same popular choice almost every time. Last time an author did this, I only won because I was the only one who made a review.

In all fairness, Rachel is due for a chapter anyway, so maybe we could tie in Rachel’s mom in another chapter close to that.

I can’t wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: While I know that you wanted Chris to end up with Noreen, it’s just not the way the story’s headed. If I had it to do over again, I might have just had Noreen be the one who Chris wanted to babysit him instead of Sue Ann. With this chapter, I wanted the readers to empathize with Chris’s plight: feel the hope he feels about being rescued, and the disappointment and dismay when he wasn’t.

I’m actually surprised Rachel got so many votes, but what can you do? I’ll do more challenges before the story ends, so you might still have a chance to see Noreen in a one-off chapter. I’ll be actively writing both chapters over the next week or so, but the main story is my priority. As always, thanks for reading and the review!

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