[Report This]Date: February 27 2018 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 4
liked the story a lot. you should add some space lines in between to make it better to read.
Author's Response: Yes, I’ve found that the website formats things oddly; it looks different on my software. I’ll try to separate changes of scenery/point-of-view better.
[Report This]Date: February 26 2018 10:45 PM Title: Chapter 4
Just read all 4 chapters. Some great characters and I love the theme of baby sitting.
However, there is one major flaw for me. What happened to Sue Ann? She was so hot and she just left? You skimmed the chapter with her, but show every detail of Shannon who I'm not exactly fond of.
Also, these Shannon scenes are getting kinda repetitive with Chris just getting stuck in the same slots over and over again.
In addition, they fight over what they should do and how they should spend their vacation for a good chunk of each chapter.
My favorite chapter was the first one, with Sue Ann just teasing Chris in the beginning. It left him wanting more of her and so do I.
I hope she comes back. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I won’t give away any specific details of the remainder of the story, you’ll just have to stay tuned and see what happens. I will say, however, that I think you’ll be pleasantly surprised with how it ends. Check back each week for new content, I promise you won’t be disappointed!