Date: March 04 2018 4:54 PM Title: Chapter 1
My only complaint is that the chapters aren't ever very long with these commissions. Doesn't feel like there is enough time for you to get into the descriptions and details that make your stories great. Other than that, I'm enjoying this one.
The pacing on many of these commission stories is definitely different than my own non-custom ones.
Date: March 04 2018 3:19 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow!!! Absolutely amazing, I loveee mindbreak stories, and transformation is great too. Good to see a great writer like you go down those roads! I know you’ve said this story is mainly going to focus on the others in his life, but I REALLY hope this bit with his sister continues/comes to fruition. I have a feeling he’ll be begging to be at those toes before long. Great work, can’t wait for part 5!
The sister will continue to be a presence in the coming chapters as he goes to his friends.
Date: February 19 2018 11:04 AM Title: Chapter 1
Very nice beginning of the story. Not very nice of them to make Ariel feel miserable for having sweaty feet. Especially not at the beginning of a story on this site!
Thank you for writing and see you next time!
It's generally a bad idea to make jokes about any potential giantess's body parts on this site.
Date: February 18 2018 3:03 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice story! Sibling stuff usually turns me off, so I pop these into Word and make some small character alterations for myself. This is great. Keep it up!
After this current section, the majority of the story will be spent with people other than David's sister