Date: July 11 2018 3:31 PM Title: Chapter 1
Amazing chapter, but I see there’s only one left unfortunately. I was really hoping David’s little boner issue would come into play, maybe ending in him enjoying his predicament. If theyre really dead, however, that plot element seems fairly useless (though i still lovee its inclusion). Anyway, this story has been my favorite for a while now. Cant wait to see how you end it!
Hehe. Well, the final chapter may still surprise you. Thanks for reading
Date: June 30 2018 12:26 PM Title: Chapter 1
I love the story, the way you write is amazing. Though I was wondering if Mary is gonna get shrunk later on aswell
Thanks very much. Mary is lucky enough that Ariel sympathizes with her, so she's off the hook
Date: March 04 2018 4:54 PM Title: Chapter 1
My only complaint is that the chapters aren't ever very long with these commissions. Doesn't feel like there is enough time for you to get into the descriptions and details that make your stories great. Other than that, I'm enjoying this one.
The pacing on many of these commission stories is definitely different than my own non-custom ones.
Date: March 04 2018 3:19 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow!!! Absolutely amazing, I loveee mindbreak stories, and transformation is great too. Good to see a great writer like you go down those roads! I know you’ve said this story is mainly going to focus on the others in his life, but I REALLY hope this bit with his sister continues/comes to fruition. I have a feeling he’ll be begging to be at those toes before long. Great work, can’t wait for part 5!
The sister will continue to be a presence in the coming chapters as he goes to his friends.