Date: February 13 2018 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
Not a bad start. Some friendly advice though, space out the paragraphs a little. Big paragraphs wear down on the reader’s eyes and make it more difficult to follow along. Especially if they are using their phone or another smaller device. I would also suggest making the chapters longer. It helps people dive into the story more. If a new chapter comes up and it only takes 2-3 minutes to read it, they can’t really get sucked into the story and are less likely to give you feedback. Just my two cents.
Overall, enjoyable to read and very interested to see where this goes.
This is very helpful. I will definitely incorperate it into my future chapters! I really appriciated it.