[Report This]Date: February 14 2018 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 5: Back on Earth
Oh, the dreaded sidebar...insert...whatever you call utilitarian chapters like this. They can be such a dread to write. A burden on our creativity.
Just so you know...you did it. I was engaged and curious and satisfied to see the characters interacting and experiencing emotional consequences of their actions. Guilt and concern for Thomas are giving Jenna unhinted at depths. It makes me wonder at what she and Thomas gave each other, how they fit together?
I like Bernie more and more.
And the Jenna/Markus thing seems much more complicated, even if it only comes down to sex.
Really intriguing and character building, you almost don’t need the cigar smoker.
Good drama, good characterizations....great work.
Peace,
pix
Oh, and nice art too.
Author's Response:
Eh...I will admit it was a chore to start this chapter, but things flowed nicely when the typing got going. I don't even know what to call it. Like a auxiliary chapter maybe? I am excited to get back to Thomas and the more fantastical stuff. Who cares about Jenna anyway? She's definitely not important.
Jenna and Markus seem to have a past huh? Maybe things didn't end well? I imagine Jenna probably wanted someone the exact opposite of Markus (He seems like kind of a dick). Thomas fits that role pretty well. He's gentle, shorter than her, probably weaker too...someone she can just nerd out with and take things slow and be safe with. It doesn't always have to be hot and heavy. It's a healthy stable relationship and nothing can ruin that!
The jury's still out on the art, but thanks for the compliment nonetheless! It will be interesting to see if I've improved by the end of this.
[Report This]Date: February 13 2018 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 5: Back on Earth
Mysteriousness mysteries gathering... and Jenna seems to be quite... unhinged, in fact. Now, I'm a little afraid for Thomas, if Jenna finds her way in the Realm he is right now. Something tell me that if she does, she won't just be your usual human spirit thingy... I want to read moar !
Author's Response:
.....I just realized I misspelled "weak" as in lack of strength as "week" as in a measure of time....I deserve zero stars for that mistake alone!
There's clearly more to Jenna than meets the eye! Transformers!!!....I mean uhh???? Well Markus and her clearly have history. You might bo onto something though. I wonder how Jenna would appear in Outworld? Hmmmmmm????...She'll do.