Date: January 21 2018 1:22 PM Title: Chapter 1: Defcons and you
As a curiosity, all my life I have been taught and I have read that the dialogues between several people open with -, and you can not even imagine what it is costing me to open them alone "(although now after reading it I am pretty much prettier and less as if it were theater, which was what I had previously written)
Date: January 21 2018 12:42 PM Title: Chapter 1: Defcons and you
I liked some of your phrases, e.g., smile of a lottery winner.
Phrases like that are what make foreign writers interesting to me. They're unique in the way they construct the English words into sentences.
That being said, I'd advise taking steps for more readable content. You can begin by familiarizing with dialog tags. It's probably the easist thing you can do at first to improve readability.
http://theeditorsblog.net/2010/12/08/punctuation-in-dialogue/
Writing is a lifelong process of improvement. Just starting writing can be the most exciting since the changes you make often have the biggest effect.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the support Link! (and thanks also for the link XD)
These first two chapters have been a little less worked because I was not used to write and handle the options on this page, (God, I still do not know how to put several heights in the menu)
Now that I have become accustomed more or less to how it works everything I will try to write again without using the dialogues and more like in the link that you have passed me.Thank you very much for everything and I hope this story entertains you half of what your story entertains me!