Reviewer: LilBob Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24 2018 7:50 PM Title: Chapter 7

Hi! I've been reading stories on this site for years, but until now had never bothered to register an account. Tonight I did, so that I could tell you how much I am really enjoying this story you are writing. It is by far one of the best I've ever read on here, and it's got so much promise and potential. Far from the typical GTS story, you are setting up what feels like a vast and expansive world. One that I find myself wanting to know a lot more about.

It's a really intriguing concept. A world ruled over by giant kids, who are physically and mentally superior in every way, yet maintain their innocence of youth. Would the world not be a lot better if it was run by such beings? Yes, most of these Elites seem arrogant by nature, but not in a malevolent way. And yes, this society is a dictatorship, but it seems about as close to a benevolent one as dictatorships can get. The Elites provide peace, stability, and I'm sure all kinds of advancements that are building for us the best world possible. All they require in return is our subservience. Lol. Some could argue that it's a very fair trade. :)

It looks like many here don't like Paisley, but it's a testament to how well she is written. I am liking her character so far. She's the first Elite that we've gotten to meet, and the first whose mindset we're really getting insights on as she develops into full Elite status. She is what I think Les will become in many ways, though I believe that Les will fight and succeed in maintaining much of her adorably sweet nature. On the vassalship, I think that Paisley likely is deceiving Les in some ways on what it will be like for her and Ky, but I think that she did mean what she said about wanting them to be happy as her slaves. I got the feeling that the relationship between an Elite and their vassal is kind of symbiotic, in that both of them will love and care for the other.

Anyway, I'm really enjoying your work, and I really hope that this story gets many, many chapters. I think that it will need many, to really do this world justice. :) Over time, I want to see the Elite societies. I want to see how they treat their vassals. I want to meet the Megas, and then the Titans. The Titans must be freaking huge, if they don't even go into cities with regular humans. Would be too damaging to the infrastructure, I'm guessing. ;) Keep up the great work!

Author's Response:

Thanks LilBob!

I find reviews like yours to be quite inspiring. When I write, I tend to make worlds far deeper than they 'need' to be, simply because I never know exactly where the story will go.

That said, I do have some ideas for the concepts mentioned in the world building, e.g., a world ruled by 'giant kids' so to speak.

However, I also like to stay character focused, so it may be a while before many of the concepts are explored in any detail.

Thanks for creating an account to review. It's been quite helpful.

Reviewer: Cloud Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24 2018 1:10 AM Title: Chapter 7

Rating switched to 'R' and a boyfriend. Very interesting.

Author's Response:

Yup, switched to R in chapter 6 if I recall. Nothing too crazy, just some typical growing-up stuff happened and wanted rating to reflect 'appropriately'.

It's not to imply the future of Les and Jakob's relationship, but rather to ensure the story can be told without superficial boundaries.

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed [Report This]
Date: January 23 2018 6:34 PM Title: Chapter 7

Good for Les! She still needs to work on her self confidence, but...Yes! Good for Jakob too! That had to be even harder to do after Les ascended! Really liked the end of this one. Y'know what I didn't like. You can guess I'll wait......

PAISLEY!! *bleeping* Paisley! Like say whatever you want about Ky! (I guess that's the accepted social structure of this bullshit society) she's a "human" you have such an extreme distaste for. Sure talk about claiming her if you want. I mean Ky would turn you down and lose her rights or her life (because that's fair), but it would be worth in my book! Les on the otherhand? I'm pretty sure she hard countered your mental influence before she was even induced! Step back a little! You have no idea if she'll be a titan or mega or....I don't know (intern?) class elite or not. And masturbating in the bathroom between classes?! I had more respect for you when I thought it was drugs. 

Also Ky's totally sick! I hope she gets better soon, because I know she'd never lie about that!

Author's Response:

Lol, I figured you'd find Paisley's character less than appealing. Let's hope she doesn't brainwash Les too much...

Thanks, NotSirk!

Reviewer: SirDarkvid Signed [Report This]
Date: January 23 2018 5:31 PM Title: Chapter 7

I'm glad to see a chapter about Les being Elite without Ky!
The relationship with your sister seems to me the best of your story, but even with it to see as an elite to those around him (Although it saddens me that I begin to have some doubt about Ky, if really paisley has guessed it)

In general the two chapters centered on Les are much better than the chapter based on Ky (but being the first and serving to connect the story I do not know if I call it based on Ky) which is a reflection of which is an elite and which does not it's XD
I hope you keep driving paisley well and that Ky improves too! It would be sad to be relegated to someone who lives from dreams that could not be fulfilled. I do not say anything about Les because I seem by far the best character in history! :)

PS: Since nobody answered in my story to the other style of dialogues they liked more or less (not with reviews but if I notice a higher rate of readings from the first to the next) and you were so kind to read them, you think What do I see as I write?

Author's Response:

Thanks, SirDarkvid! I'm glad you enjoy Les as a character. I too usually prefer her pov, though Ky has her own admirable qualities.

I'll read your new chapters and let you know my thoughts.