Date: January 21 2018 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 6
I'm really liking the character growth here from Ky, as she's becoming a lot more loving, I guess, towards her sister. That being said, I also admire her ability to dream and always believe in herself to such extent. She's gonna be famous one day, I know it. Either for something really good or really stupid.
That aside, nice chapter, and I think Les's physical abilities growing and her becoming more physically able than Ky provides another twist to this story. Or maybe I just think too much :)
Author's Response:
Ky doesn't seem to show love well, but perhaps she just has her own way. Les knows her best, so maybe she sees something not everyone does.
Thanks for the commentary, asapshvn!
Date: January 21 2018 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 6
I really love the relationship of these two and don't want them to be apart, but I'm getting scared!!
Good for Les. She deserves to have confidence and YES even feel superior! She is, if not already than soon enough. It may cause some friction but I think as she matures she'll learn control....although...I feel like there are seeds here that will lead Les to some...troublesome potentialities in the future. I'm actually more worried for Kyliegh in that regard.
And speaking of Ky. She has my vote for prime! Until further notice I've decided to hate Lesser Titan class elites! You're not busting drug rings you're making humans your slaves! For what reason?! They live a fraction of your lifetime and you outclass them in almost every conceivable way! I've had pets but I never wanted them to die when I did! There are some unanswered questions about vassalship that need inspecting with a fine tooth comb! What was I talking about?....Oh yeah! Kyliegh Watts for Earth Prime! It may be a child's naive dream but I think she can do it!
All that being said I just love the characterization in these little conversations. There's just the right amount of tension and affection. Normally someone like Ky would seem like a jerk but I just root for her determination. And Les' insecurity and passivity would seem annoying but it's not. I'm also just really jealous at how fast you people can write. That's not just you. There are quite a few excellent stories that seem to keep updating. I'm being left behind!!
Author's Response:
Elites and the 'superior' races definitely set themselves up to receive hate from humans of their world, and of course from readers. However we haven't seen much hate from the humans in story, presumably they've become indoctrinated to status quo. Perhaps all except Ky. We'll see.
As for writing fast, not so much. Most of these chapters were written and simply needed editing before posting. However, having reached the end of my pool of chapters, future updates will likely not be as frequent.
[Report This]Date: January 21 2018 5:29 PM Title: Chapter 6
Really great chapter. I like how you're steadily making it so Les is trying to make her own decision with regards to having her sensations project and how bad they make her feel, but still confiding in Ky enough that she could admit that. Ky setting a new goal is interesting, and it makes their dynamic more fun, of course they're young and naive and wouldn't know any better about reality works, but thats up to the reader's interpretation.
Solid update
Author's Response:
Thanks! Ky seems very goal oriented, and not one to stay down for long. Hopefully she's able to maintain her optimism and hopefully it pays off.
Date: January 21 2018 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 6
This chapter ... I do not know what to think.
I can see that Ky plans to become Prime and I can see that she worries that Les grows slower than her, in turn I see that Les begins to feel that innate superiority of the elite but combines with those feelings of love for her sister, the time that each time is filtering more to her, symptom of her growth as Elite.
Today you've caught me completely XD I have no idea where the next chapter will go and I love that a lot.
In reference to my question yesterday I understood that if an elite makes you their vassal you will be until the death of the elite, implying that the vassal would lengthen his long life to continue serving the Elite.
Now with this latest information the truth worries me much more that Ky is not elite, and therefore die long before Les and how it would take ...
Look how much you make me worry about two fictional sisters so much!
(It's a clear joke XD but that now worries me)
Author's Response:
Yes, assuming natural causes, Ky would die long before Les. But they're both still young, and at that age, death often isn't a concern. They both have long lives ahead of them.
However, for the reader, it can be more concerning.