Reviews For Gemstone
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Reviewer: Odysseus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 10 2019 6:27 PM Title: Intro

Still a great story. The only feedback I would give is that you have a lot of incomplete sentences. You have a lot of sentences that just have a verb that ends in -ing and no subject. Like "Holding John out in front of her chest." That is not a complete sentence. If you said "Mary held John out in front of her chest." that would be better .



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Reviewer: stargate1990 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 15 2019 11:24 PM Title: Intro

Amazing story, love resurrections.  Hope for some butt stuff, but so far the story has been great!

Reviewer: Maximus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 15 2019 9:58 PM Title: Deal

This is great, her casual cruelty is delicious. 

 

I like the creativity you put into his various demises and his utter helplessness. 

 

Great job!

 

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