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Reviewer: 2997 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 02 2022 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 1

One of the best stories ever. It's a shame the author hasn't written more.

Reviewer: Bronzehawkz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 12 2019 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 1

Such an amazing story, I wish the writer would create more short stories, he's so great!

Reviewer: Skulldeath50 Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 15 2018 3:33 PM Title: Chapter 1

This story is amazing, and I think all my love for it has already been said by fellow revierwers. I espicially loved the unaware part of it all. You kept Holly's reaction moderate to the crisis, like it was just another small issue in her life, though it was the death of the tiny. The contrast of that is what I try to follow in my stories now.

Reviewer: Gizmo2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 06 2018 9:51 AM Title: Chapter 1

That was awesome, keep up the good work!

Your descriptions of what happened as he made his way through Holly were very well written, you achieved the balance between brevity and wordiness, which is something that's often hard to do. I hope you write another story, this one was really good!

Reviewer: Moony Signed [Report This]
Date: January 05 2018 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 1

One tiny thing though, you might want to add the unaware tag to this. 

Reviewer: Moony Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 05 2018 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 1

That...was...awesome. No words...should've sent a poet. 

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