Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: December 14 2017 6:29 AM Title: Shooting session, part. 2

Okay, the last chapters have been fascinating.  The way control seems to swirl between the two of them.  Give and take, it really can shake things up with these two.

Shannon’s being in control and her intellect and imagination running wild, it sort of sets up her physical accident later.  Great writing.

Alejandro’s internal struggles, seem to mimic his physical struggles.  I enjoy how you are using this device to reveal his inner resources.  It is a brilliant characterization on your part, well done.

In spite of literary merit, these chapters were nice and steamy.  A good slow burn is building between them, but both of them are staying aware of the consequences.  A nice sprinkle of frustration, a slow building of trust, you have a wonderful recipe for romance.

The accident and its aftermath, I have to admit, I did not clearly understand.  The issues of scale seem slightly exaggerated and are giving me a bit of a hard time visualizing.  But that’s a failing on my part. 

The way Shannon gently handled the injured Alejandro, while struggling to keep panic at bay, was endearing and sweet.  I really am liking her inspite of being a biggie in this world. 

Thanks for keeping at it.  Your work ethic is inspiring.

Peace

pix

Author's Response:

Thanks. You'll see that handling him was great but that Shannon should also have handled herself. She'll have some explaing to do ^^