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Reviewer: smoki1020 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 11 2017 3:45 PM Title: Heart to heart

fantatic chapter, both are confused and in love #inrightdirection !!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Thnaks a lot ! I'm glad you like it !

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 11 2017 1:13 PM Title: Heart to heart

Geez! You have some of the fastest turnaround I've ever seen! A little refinement and you could get a job doing this professionally! I blink and there's two new chapters.

Okay: Shannon get your shit together! What the fuck are you doing?! You're a MAJOR not a bitch in heat! Show a least the illusion of composure!

I have to wonder what's going through Jandro's head here. One heartfelt conversation where she was constantly talking over him does not a lover make. Is he falling for her whiles? I know he only agreed to make out a little and honestly he's a healthy young man so it makes a little sense but still. It still feels a little too easy and too soon. It's been less than a day since they've reunited. Shannon's been pretty transparent in what she wants and that taints her words of changing MAJOR's perspective and the future a little too. She seems like a nice and caring young woman but she'a also a brutal negotiator! Don't forget that Alejandro!

Soo ot seems a little bit convenient. At least the timing. It has me slighty suspicious Shannon is a tier 3. I'm interested in the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Next chapter will try to deal with Alejandro's side. All I can tell is hat he is in a strange state of mind, the last two days have been nothing but new experiences to him, he's a little lost right now... But he sax something in Shannon when they kissed. Also, he has not fallen yet ! XD

 

Thanks for the professional writer comparison. My dream iq to become one (but I'm not betting on it). Strangely enough, while I spend more time on M/m than my other project, it still motivate me to write on it everyday. I guess it's good then ! ^^

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