Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: December 10 2017 10:50 AM Title: History lesson

    Okay, I really like this chapter.  Alejandro is so calm and Sannon is so nervous.  And I like how he’s actually making an effort to make her more comfortable.  Seeing him control the scene is really refreshing.  The old Alejandro I’ve been rooting for has returned.

    I’m going to have to change my opinion on a Alejandro / Shannon relationship, at least a little.  I still think her deserves to see his own worth in his own terms, but the mirror scene tells me that Shannon’s attention is helping him do that.   Maybe they really can be good for each other.   As things take on a more sweet and subtle tone their interactions seem more healthy, and mutually beneficial.   So, basically, I don’t know.  It actually makes me wonder how, or if, they could make it work.  As thing were previously going I could see some disaster coming a mile away, now I’m truly in suspense as I see it has possibilities to be deep and meaningful but could turn much more complicated.
    Now that it has some delicacy it has some fragility.  It has a chance of breaking and being ruined and that is suddenly adding some tension.  And Alejandro and Shannon have an equal chance of messing it up.
    And this sudden shift doesn’t feel clunky or strange.  It’s a new day with new possibilities.   You showed it as a natural transition, making the changes flow along in a way that carries the audience.
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r37;    The Inn’s name...r36;Wow, that was a sad story.  I think you might have to work out a few details to make that work out with Notsirk’s world, because I don’t think tinies were quite so rare before that much alluded to dark age, but I would still imagine there were communities founded by biggies just so they can everything their size.  But I’m guessing, maybe it’s “pix close,” maybe it’s not.

    Superior work and a pleasure to read.  Thank you, again, for creating and sharing.

Peace

pix

Author's Response:

Glad your liking the whay the main characters are depicted here. Shannon has really grown on me and now, I want her and ALejandro to be good for each others, but first they have to clear the air, so to speak. As for the inn's name... the beauty of all of it is that all the sources are from MAJORS so... who knows if it's really the truth or not, right ?