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Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 08 2017 5:58 AM Title: So good to see you !

     We usually imagine the biggies of this world being strong in every way; physically powerful but also confident.  Honestly, it makes them seem a little dense to me, but I really have a hard time liking any of them or their attitudes. 
     Shannon is no exception, it could be argued that Alejandro’s mom was trying to “set them up” but the fact that Shannon concluded that so quickly speaks to the vanity of the biggies of this realm. 
     Still, she has an inner softness, room for some doubts and even fears.  She’s very accessible in that way.  Also, the way she stood up for Alejandro in the face of his mother’s doubts, that was most admirable, even empathetic. 

     “Minor By The Sea” seems like an odd name for a hotel in a town with only one minor.  Alejandro can say it’s named after him.  Heehee.

     I really like the way the characters relate to eachother.  Old friends meeting up after a long time apart.  Lindsay, not remembering any of them, must be feeling a little left out.  But there is this lingering sense of waiting for Alejandro, like he is some undeclared guest of honor, a nice, subtle, believable tension hangs in the air of the last scene.  Very nice stuff.



Author's Response:

well, Alejandro isn't Old Creek first minor. The hotel's story will be revealed later on on the story. I can tell you it's a sad one. Next chapter is full on 'Rando and the fourth has the two point of views. 

I can thanks NotSirk for his inspiring setting. Since the major (eh) mysteries and rules of this setting are established in his story, I can go wild suite easely. And writing makes waitig for his next chapter easier ^^

 

Reviewer: Cloud Signed [Report This]
Date: December 08 2017 12:57 AM Title: So good to see you !

Very nice story. I'm deeply interested to see how Alejandro and Shannon develops. We have Shannon, who seems like the type that would be unaware of the deeper emotional range minors can have. I hope to see some discovery, conflict, but most of all, some gentle giantess stuff.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. Chapter 3 will come out this evening, perhaps with the fourth, and our two main characters will begin their interactions. So far, inspiration is here, which is great ! The proper giantess stuff will truly begin in Chapter 4.

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