[Report This]Date: December 21 2017 3:05 PM Title: Preparation
Thank you for writing this very good story! I really enjoy it and it brightnes my day when I see an update.
I really like how you get across that Shannon is very big and intimidating, even if she is not that much bigger than Alejandro by this site's standards.
I also like the in depth character building and the changing of perspectives between Shannon and Alejandro.
Author's Response:
You're welcome. I'm glad you're liking it, I'll try to keep the quality for as long as I can :) ! Also... Happy holidays !
Date: December 10 2017 10:19 AM Title: Preparation
I like the story. It's a bit like Imagi8's GH-2X
Author's Response:
Whoa, thanks but I don't think that I'm anywhere near GH-X2 levels of quality, really. NotSirk is , however :)
Date: December 08 2017 5:36 PM Title: Preparation
Okay so, clearly someone was busy writing FOUR CHAPTERS!!!! in the time it took me to write one! I don't feel upstaged....Anyway I gots reading to do.
[Report This]Date: December 07 2017 6:58 PM Title: Preparation
Well, with both Alejandro and Shannon demanding to have their story told, I can understand you relenting. I promise to not think less of you. Just don’t think of it as a surrender...we can pretend it was all your idea (wink.)
Shannon seems interesting, someone with obvious assets that hide her depths. That makes for a fascinating character.
I like how she’s ,in many ways, the opposite of of Alejandro. He has aspects that mark him as damaged, to some people’s minds undesirable or at least less appealing. He’s not happy or cuddly or any of the standard things tinies are expected to be. Where she is someone people would find obviously appealing.
The fact that he has forgotten her name, but not her part in the incident that scarred him so gave this introduction a level of tension.
I did like the way Alejandro relates to his sister. It adds an element of sadness that she never got to meet the lighter version of him. But he still indulges her and treats her nice, but he does it as a thoughtful and deliberate person. So an argument could be made that his affection has greater value than that of a typical minor who just loves everyone.
Thanks for taking up the virtual pen again and giving us another view of a super cool character.
Peace
pix
Author's Response:
Haha, yeah, we'll say it was my idea *wink*.
Glad you're liking Shannon. Honestly, she's the hardest character to write in this story, mainly because I'm rooting for Alejandro, I ant to depict how MAJOR are so often oblivious of minor's feeling, but in the sme time, I want Shannon to be a sympathetic character. I hope I'll have succeeded by chapter 2 to at least give readers a solid foundation to care about her. It's a spoiler, but she may be endgame for our tiny hero... if she manages to be good at the little "dance" they'll have.
As for Lindsey, yeah, I'm happy with the way she came out. Somewhat oblivious, but also candid and good-hearted.
I hope you'll enjoy the next chapters :) !