Date: December 10 2017 8:08 AM Title: Prologue
I almost never leave a review but this story is so amazing. I love the world you are crafting and was honestly a little sad when I reached the last chapter and couldn't keep reading! I can't wait to see where this goes.
Your comment means a lot to me. Thank you! I'm already writing the next installment and can't wait to post it. Stay tuned!
Date: December 10 2017 1:40 AM Title: Prologue
I love this. It's kind of reminding me of Brandon Sanderson's The Reckoners series, although with some obvious size pervertedness leaning in.
I didn't know how much I'd love a forced mind control lesbian scenario until I read it. That was seriously fucking hot.
You're doing awesome work here. I hope you'll continue!
I never heard of the 'Reckoners' series. I looked it up and was kinda surprised how similar my idea is to it, lol. But my story is still a lot different with the direction I'm taking it. The Pirends in my story are super secretive and not flashy with their powers. To be honest, I was heavily inspired by Stephen King's 'Doctor Sleep' when I started writing this story. Also, mind control is severely under-used in this fantasy. It's hot, right? Thank you for your comment! Stay tuned for more.
Date: December 09 2017 11:47 PM Title: Prologue
To be fair these are really well done little shorts for different characters and scenarios. I wouldn't mind seeing more if them actually and maybe seeing the return of the title character as well lol
They won't be shorts. Right now, I'm introducing all the characters with their own points of view. Like a web, this story is kinda all over the place, but all the characters will converge on each other into a single point. Luna will be back.
Date: December 09 2017 1:56 PM Title: Prologue
"Should I continue? Is anyone reading this?"
YES. And I love it! Please do continue, this is great. Cant wait for more action, I loved how you made the girl willingly worship in chapter 2 :)
I will continue. I was just wondering if anyone was reading this, lol.
Date: December 09 2017 1:01 PM Title: Kalani
I read the other chapters and thought hey this is a pretty good story. I read this chapter and was like wow I can't wait to see where this goes. Then I read your last part. Sucks that you are abondoning it :(
Maybe I should change that last note. I haven't fully committed to abandoning the story just yet. Although, it's a little demotivating at times to not receiving any feedback. Maybe I'm a bit too touchy. Eh, whatever. Thanks for your comment tho!