[Report This]Date: January 19 2018 4:44 PM Title: Her Friend in Trouble
Is that town really big enough to feed two giantesses?
Thank you for writing, I like the story
Author's Response:
Well at least for the time being they only have one to worry about feeding. It's good to know you like the story and thank you for the review.
Date: January 18 2018 6:24 AM Title: Her Friend in Trouble
If you decided to put another giantess, maybe she can be a REAL monster that influences Justine. Maybe the other giantess can be the embodiment of Justine's dark side if Justine were to continue going down her dark road. That's just my thought though but like NotSirk said, it's your story.
If you want my opinion, I think it's fine with Justine alone but whatever you do, I'll read this spectacular story regardless. Awesome that Justine saved Christina like that and damn... Burrying that guy was one hell of a punishment. I'd freak out if I was burried alive. O.O
Love your story as always. I always look foward to a new update.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your feedback and for such praise as to call this story spectacular. Honestly getting burried alive would be a living nightmare for me as well.
After thinking it over for a few day's I have chosen to keep Justine as the only giantess in the story.
Date: January 18 2018 5:39 AM Title: Her Friend in Trouble
Writing Advice: While I'm far from a great writer I can say this. Make sure you have a good reason to add a second giantess. Think of how it will change the story and what purpose it will serve. Is she meant to fight Justine? Join Justine? How does it change the status quo for the better and can the story work just as well without her?
I know things are calming down at the moment as Justine reflects on the people she's killed and consumed. That's actually a good thing to help the audience recover from the action, but if your worried you don't know what's next it's simple. Justine needs to make a decision. She's been mostly reactionary which is to be expected from turning into a giantess out of nowhere, but she can't go like that forever. At some point she'll have to be proactive in her own destiny or she'll end up starving in the forest. And you've already shown it! She defended herself against those attackers, freed herself from her abusive father, released John and that kid's father (which she didn't have to do), and even saved Christina from a rapist and possibly murderer.
So that's my input. At least for your main character. Justine needs to decide who she wants to be and what she wants to do. For better or worse she's a giantess now and holds a lot of power. How will she use it? Will she become a benevolent guardian? A despicable tyrant? Maybe she'll decide to try and find a cure? Anyway once that's done it will be easy for her to work off other characters. How will John factor in? What about the spy? Is an army coming for her? I'm just throwing out random stuff now but you get it.
I hope this helps or is the feedback you wanted. Regardless of my thoughts remember at the end of the day it's YOUR story. You could have Justine fight a T-rex just for lols! I'd read it!
Author's Response:
Thank you for the writing advice and feedback as it was helpful. My main idea for a second giantess was for her to be Justine's ally, but I have elected to keep Justine as the only giantess in the story. I could change my mind at some point in the future, but at least right now I plan on Justine being the only giantess in the story.
As for if Justine will become viewed as benevolent or despicable to those living in her local community they will likely by a large margin see her as despicable for the time being.
The funny thing about Justine fighting a T-rex is that I could invoke the lab from the first chapter to make a T-rex fight happen, but unfortunately the T-rex will be staying in it's native place in time for the sake of the plot.