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Reviewer: KindaEmbarassed Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 27 2017 10:29 PM Title: Wicked prayers have been answered

Love your piece, some of the grammar is a bit rough tho. If you have an email or something I would be more than happy to do some touching up for you.

Reviewer: Fertility goddess loli lilith Signed [Report This]
Date: November 25 2017 3:00 AM Title: Wicked prayers have been answered

Having finally completed a story I realize that  the level of detail required to capture the terror and wonder of being an inch tall turns the body into a series of math problems where defining a curves slope is the way of making a giantess sexy. The story and characters are the only interesting parts of this, but the physical descriptions require such a detailed understanding of the bodies proportions that no one can do it without a model and even than the descriptions sounds like manaquin measurements. This is an alright revenge story, but it's not very arousing, maybe if it was a hentai it would be, but describing the diameters of different spheres doesn't really sound sexy. 5/10, I think with models I or anyone else could write these but no one in their right mind would have a three year old model pose for these and it really points out the limits on descriptive writing when everything is gigantic and has that much more detail.

Reviewer: Franchise Writer Signed [Report This]
Date: November 22 2017 3:46 PM Title: Wicked prayers have been answered

A quick read, but not necessarily a bad one. I just finished both you and your co-author's stories. I always enjoy when people add in the unusual and these two definitely fall hand in hand. Sufficit to say, I can't tell if either of you is new to writing or not, but if so might I suggest a few tips? When describing the scene, make sure to give strong visuals so it builds up before your characters emerge, and when they do describe them in depth. Seeing the characters instead of having your mind randomly fill the slots is easier for immersion. I'm curious to see what you might do next. I can see the biblical tones in your story in contrast to your co-authors and that's an odd touch, but a strong one to use none the less. Either way, I'd say keep writing and keep at it. You could have potential to make any story great on this site, as long as you put the time and effort into it.

Author's Response:

Having a model would definitely help the description aspect, or even just knowing the average lengths of lips fingers feet and other body parts for each age. seeing the proportion of their body  to a terrified shrunken person about to die before a giantess. Sister Maggie's shoes and dress need more detail even if nun and catholic school girl are pretty easy dresses to imagine. I've added more descripion to chapter one and the ending.

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