Date: November 12 2017 1:51 PM Title: A little hiccup
As you say. it's just a setup; but a very intriging setup it is. The atomic change rather than biological was a great way for Jake to keep his clothes on, very inventive of you (minus the windowsill not shrinking too, "he he he").
I think you have the potential for a terrific story here. Your writing style is easy to read, your story flows without getting sidetracked on needless details.
As far as any critisms, only three minor ones. First, paragraph spacing, or lack there of. I heard others say paragraph spacing is sometimes lost transfering a story over to this web page.
Second, grammar check. Now I'm being really nit-picky; but it's great when you can read a story without a double take on something "but I did didn't even". Then again it is Emma speaking and she could have said it that way.
Third, a bit of description would be nice, not only of what the girl looks like but also what Jake felt and generally thought while watching her.
Please take my comments in the context that I never posted a story here and you have. So I shouldn't be critical of someone like yourself who has contributed so graciously and wonderfully.
I can't wait to read more. Please continue.