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Reviewer: Daxel Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 21 2018 9:33 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game

I found this story last night and I was hooked from the beginning. I really like Izzy's personality and I'm very courious about the minors history Izzy is trying to uncover.
In general characters interactions are very funny I laughed a lot.
And I know is not the most important aspect of the story but damn I'm rooting for Izzy/Mei.

Author's Response:

Well thanks for youe dedication! I do like writing humor and I'm glad it's hitting with someone. The history will be revealed in slow chunks. It's more of a background detail to Izzellah's story. A side quest if you will.

 You're not the first to be on the Mei x Izzy ship. I'm very curious if that's popular. Mei's supposed to be seen as rather manipulative towards Izzy.

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 21 2018 6:55 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game

Okay, at first I was reeeally disappointed in my favorite character.  Izzy has struggled and fought for every bit of dignity she can get.  Then she lets, no insists, that she be a prize in some biggie nonsense.  I really thought that it was cheap and even though Izzy’s thoughtless overconfidence and impulsiveness are well established, I though she was getting better.  This wasn’t just a back slide, this was her throwing out all she’d learned so far AND becoming worse than a minor stereotype.  This was her being worse than she was at the beginning of the story.

And for what?  The prize that she’s wagering her dignity on... well...she’s never even tried just saying “all of you just leave me alone.”

Part of me is going to stick with these opinions.  Part of me is very disappointed to see Izzy performing in a way that seems obtuse.  It’s as though she hasn’t learned anything in the story we’ve read so far.  Like we’ve had 9 chapters of character non-development. 

But part of me can completely see it.  Izzy want’s to earn some respect.  She want’s to gamble and she want’s to win.  She has a point, that the biggies all underestimate her and even disrespect her and that may certainly give her an edge.

So, even though I thought the worst as first, Izzy turning this into a “put up or shut up” moment was endearing.  I was really with her.  It may have disastrous consequences, but it was such a cool moment.

In some ways she’s still being too passive.  She didn’t do any of the logical stuff like demand a “no mental powers usage” rule or any other common sense measure.  Character’s who don’t think are a chore to read, but when you think that’s what you’re seeing and yet they surprise you that’s pure gold. 

Truth to tell, I would see Izzy saying “since you guys all think you’re twice as good as me, you’re  going to wait here 30 minutes while I hide and you’re going to have 15 minutes to find me.”  Then, since they haven’t made any rules, she gets out of sight, goes to her Mustang and drives until she runs out of gas...ha ha...screw you stoopid biggies.  Izzy wins!

Really, Izzy is risking so much, her integrity and respect can’t be recovered when they’re gone, but she seems to feel it’s worth it.  If she loses, she’s just another tiny who get’s used by a biggie in one of these stories, worse, because she set herself up.  If she wins though, it’s not much of prize, but it could mean a little more respect from these stuck up losers...wait...it could mean that they would learn something.... it could result in them growing in empathy and understanding... ... ...

Naaaahhhh...

Fingers crossed for the tiny heroine....

Great chapter.  Great stakes.  Great set up.  Great suspense that will last until the next chapter.  Or longer. 

Thanks for keeping at it...and your art is just cool.

Peace

pix



Author's Response:

I can admit the premise of the game and Izzellah going along with it is a little contrived. My argument would be they were going to fight over her anyway. Much like Alejandro's childhood experience from Kurogane's work, it's just kind of what MAJORS do. One day Sabrina would have a black eye and just stop hanging around when Mei passed by for example. At least this way Izzellah feels she's involved. It's on the extreme edge of her character, probably a significant flaw she should work on. She has nothing to prove!.....but yeah you called me out on it. (darn) 

Also there's still a whole week to go!....And if it hasn't been obvious from the pacing I don't really skip time too much. Seven days over 9 chapters! (Actually that might not be accurate. I'll have to check now......you get it.) Izzy still has her weekend and another week to go! Plenty of time for shit to go down! Although part of me wonders if I should speed things up a bit? Who knows? Surely we don't need to see what Izzy's up to every day!

Reviewer: meereten01 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 21 2018 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game

Here, a review by the laziest reviewer ever. It took me like a day to submit it.

Seems like some people are really fighting over Izzellah. And a pity that it isn't a physical fight, although Mei is up to something. It also seems as if two of the Majors at least have a very strong advantage over the other two. I wonder what will happen next.

Thank you for writing, and unitl next time!

 

BTW is Mei based/supposed to be Mei from Overwatch?



Author's Response:

A review is always appreciated even if it's seen as late somehow. Don't fret.

There may still be a physical aspect to this game. I mean we are dealing with MAJORS here. What happens if two find Izzy at the same time? Only one can win after all.......

Thanks for the comment and no Mei isn't based on Mei from Overwatch. It's just a nice name and I like illiteration. I mean my main character's named Izzellah Ignacia Ivory. I'd do it for all my characters if I didn't think it was ridiculous. You can pretend she looks like Mei until I draw her though!

Reviewer: Afroking Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 20 2018 2:56 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game

Yay glad to see more of Izzy! really love seeing these characters.

 back a while ago you mentioned going back to your older stories and I gotta say I loved 'Trials'. I know Its been a long time since that story but that was one of my favorite stories from my early years on this site. I would love to see such a good story come back.



Author's Response:

A "Trials" fan! I can't believe it!  That story has a special place in my heart. My first story on this site, it inspired a lot of the things I love today! It deserves a look over. I'm pretty sure some of those characters and ideas will show up again somehow. 

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20 2018 2:20 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game

Such a tease ! Izzy has a very packed week ahead of herself... but if I'm not wrong, she'll have the week-end for herself, which could be great ! I also like the art, it has to be said ! I hope your computer get fixed soon, so we can have more of your work to peruse !



Author's Response:

Sorry for the short chapter but I was under a bit of a time constraint! Don't worry Izzy has a film to watch, a person to find, a match to see, and a game to win! Lots for her to do. 

Thanks for the kind words on the art. I am eternally grateful! I know my art's not the worst in the world but I know it's far from great as well. I can only hope to improve as time goes on. 

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 20 2018 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game

The game is a foot or under it...never know with these major folks.



Author's Response:

Izzy might find herself under foot if she's not careful! 

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