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Reviewer: Kosmita Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 09 2017 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 7: minor/Bonding

The dynamic between Majors and Minors remind me of Aldous Huxley’s novel, ‘Brave New World’ where there’s a social caste system, and which everyone in their caste is made to love their caste. The Epsilons learn what their role in society is – embrace it, love it, and wouldn’t have any other way. They especially don’t question it. Sure, the Alphas seem to have a great life and get all kinds of perks, but being an Alpha is tough work and really obtrusive, the poor Epsilons would be taught.

Here, we have Minors that are being indoctrinated to embrace their lives. Go to school, but don’t bother trying to master Mathematics, English, etc. By the way, bonding is great for you. By the way, you can live a pretty chill life by just bonding with a Major and sticking with them for the rest of their lives. Dat indoctrination, tho.

And this is why I love Izzy. Nurture vs. Nature. Was Izzy brought up by her father to question life and society? Or is it something innate…maybe instinctive? Izzy is a tough, smart chick in a world not prepared for her. This was illustrated in the chat she had with Lucy after class was over. Why the hell was this Izzy chick so inquisitive when every other Minor just accepted their lot in life? I love how Izzy’s moxie is impacting everyone she encounters in such profound ways.

Personal feelings time:  My favorite characters thus far are Izzy, Sabrina, and Brenda. I need to see more of Brenda! I feel like I’m being jipped here, lol. It’s like your other story, ‘Small.’ I just kept waiting for Izzy and Brenda to finally interact, and it only lasted a chapter! HOWEVER, I have my hopes up for this story because of that unconscious defense Izzy put up for Brenda during her mind-melt thingy. My heart fucking melted! There’s a chance for some Izzy and Brenda action.

Anyway, great story! Keep doing what you’re doing. I can’t wait to see a new chapter!



Author's Response:

Izzy's mostly influenced by her mother who passed away. You'll learn more about her later but Sheila was fairly independent for a minor and Izzellah wants to do better than her. Izzy reminds Ignacio too much of his late wife to really coddle her too much. Letting Izzy have a life is what Sheila wanted. Although letteing her have her freedom is kind of spoiling her in a different way. Now she's used to it and so headstrong she'd fight him every time he tried to step in. Also he's just kind of a sloppy lazy guy except when it comes too working out..

I try to make Izzy not seem too special but I'd be lieing if I said her presence didn't have an impact.

Brenda will return!.....eventually.

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 09 2017 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 7: minor/Bonding

Okay...that was weird.  And a little off putting.  Lisa did a sort of 180, character wise, it seemed she was a low ambition and immature ditz, pretty much what you’d expect from a tiny of this world.  I’m glad Izzy has a friend, but Lisa... she’s really kind of a not-very-smart-know-it-all.  Again, Izzy is getting the bottom of the barrel as far as relationships go.  That said, Lisa seems to be changing, inspired by the cool and questioning Izzy.  So I have hope for the halfsie.  She’ll either wind up more discriminating like Izzy or she’s a prime candidate for a role on reality TV.

But, okay, the hugging scene with Lisa and Romeo was kinda’ sweet.

Still not seeing any reason for Izzy to want to bond.  It’s seeming more and more like she’s been getting programmed with biggie propaganda to seek something that is merely a feel good for her but so important to the big morons.  Christina may have the skill to paint the communing portion of it in pretty, innocent colors, but that just makes it seem more and more like a biggie trap to me.  Cuz Lisa seems really quite “lessened” by her experiences.  She’s enjoyed being used by the big dummies, but she has nothing to really show for it.  Where bonded and post bonded biggies seem calmer and more focused. 

Izzy shouldn’t really mind the whole capital letters thing.  TV is always spelled with all capital letters and look how stoopid that is.

Peter’s still a stooge.  Even more so, now that we see he thinks he’s Heathcliff.

Sabrina is even less annoying.   Still think she’s bullocks, but less annoying bullocks.  And I’m liking Mei’s stalker mentality less and less.  

It’s strange, but I liked that Izzy defended Brenda reflexively.  Like she won her conflict with her and is being magnanimous.  It almost makes me hate the walking disaster less.  Though, again, it’s Izzy’s subtle, yet glowing character that the moment reveals that really makes her tale shine for me.

Overall this was a fun to read chapter.  There were a few too many moments of the same old lost and ignorant and confused Izzy but they yielded some laughs so that made them enjoyable.  Your writing was solid and effectively communicated some difficult concepts.  You tackled what must have been a challenging chapter with some style and humor.  Good work.

Peace

pix



Author's Response:

Honestly I was very nervous about this chapter! Trying to experiment and write the more fantastical ideas in my head. I'm still not sure it comes acroos well but your points help greatly. I tried to flesh out Lisa more and show that she's as much a victim of the established quo as anyone even and at the same time give her a bit of a mentor role. Yeah she's more like a Monica Steeps than maybe she'd like but I think her and Izzy can teacg each other. At least that's my goal.

I know your getting fed up with Izzy's ignorance but time wise it hasn't even been a week. That's not an excuse but it is a factor. Normally her mom would've (a minor) would've coached her but she's gone. That kind of threw a wrench in things and Ignacio?...well you'll see soon. You might like the upcoming chapters? Izzy's got some words for her papa! Until then this is just who Izzy is for now, but she's asking questions! And no, there is no reason for her to get a bond but now you probably know why MAJORS are hungry for it! 

Peter's a stooge! Still thinking about giving him a chapter though!

Is Sabrina growing on you? She's growing on Izzy! Look out! Although neither of them seem interested in bonding? Maybe Sabrina's slightly more interested then she lets on but? Is she even really a contender now?

Hey you gotta play the game! You think getting a bond is easy? You gotta use your opportunities to your advantage. Bonding with your brother is boring! Izzy's young and trim and smart! Mei's gotta make plays! Pffft. Most MAJORS are like this in some way. Even Mei can't escape it. She's just as thirsty as anyone but is it better to rush Izzy like a rhino or play the long game? You can judge that yourself. Mabel or Mei? Who's more aggravating? 

Anyway thanks for the comment. Don't know when I'll update again. I might have a few more in me before Christmas.....keyword "might"

 

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 09 2017 12:23 AM Title: Chapter 7: minor/Bonding

Mind. Blown.

Like, man did I not expect it. The bond's so much more than what I believed it was ! I can't wait to actually read about Izzy first time bonding with a MAJOR, it ought to be some serious rodeo !

You get a ten out of ten mark !



Author's Response:

Well I hope this chapter helps add some context at least. It's basically a free pass to do whatever you want because it's all in your head. There are some serious repercussions though. One could be scarred for life, but your character has some experience with that. Really looking forward to reading more!

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 08 2017 7:35 PM Title: Chapter 7: minor/Bonding

LISA GOT THE IZZY, SHE GOT THE IZZY!!!

 

That was a hell of a read! Like reading Avatar but you won't have to wait almost ten years or more for sequels that don't come. It was brilliantly crafted and a great way to explain bonding to the readers in a more forward sense.

 

Also Rabbit Izzy is adorable.



Author's Response:

AUSTIN GOT THE STUNNER!!!....I mean, uhh yeah...Lisa got the Izzy. Izzy likes Lisa. Friends. Good for them.

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