[Report This]Date: October 30 2017 3:18 PM Title: Chapter 4: The Red
love it so far! This story seems so well thought out! Like, I mean, this is really, really freakin' good! The anticipation is incredible! You've got me on the edge of my sea, wondering what will happen as this whole thing unfolds! Great work! Such a unique setting you're using here that hasn't been used before. An awesome break from the generic backdrops and over-used story settings and plots.
Author's Response:
Hey there Jack! I appreciate your response and I am happy you are enjoying the story thus far! I hope I keep you coming back each chapter!
[Report This]Date: October 27 2017 8:33 PM Title: Chapter 4: The Red
If Mira weighs 900 million tons compared to Anthony, then she weighs 1,800,000,000,000 pounds compared to him. For simplicity's sake, let's assume Mira has an average weight of 168.5 pounds. This would make Mira (1,800,000,000,000 / 168.5 = 10,682,492,581.6) times her normal weight when compared to Anthony. This would make her (cuberoot[10,682,492,581.6] = 2202.37296171) times her height when compared to Anthony. This means Anthony is (1 / 2202.37296171 = 0.0004540557) times his regular height. Assuming Anthony has an average height of 69.2 inches, when shrunk he stands at (0.0004540557 * 69.2 = 0.03142065444) inches, about 0.798 millimeters. That's around the height of 15 stacked papers. Bullshit he's "almost the size of a Fruity Loop" (it's Froot Loops btw, not Fruity Loops). Brought to you by a pedantic math geek who felt like doing a bunch of calculations using a throwaway number that was obviously hyperbole and not meant to be taken literally.
Author's Response:
LOL! Alright, couple of things here:
1. I love this response lol, I also shared it with my girlfriend and we both enjoyed it immensely.
2. Fruity Loops don't break copyright license! But, my girlfriend also laughed at my use of non-trademarked names. So you're not alone.
3. Easily my worst subject in school has always been math, and I just want you to know, I honestly tried to work out what her weight would have been, but my limited understanding of mathematics prevented me from coming up with a more accurate assessment. I am both elated and impressed you were able to come up with even a semblance of an answer. I found, though some of the results I did not understand, your reply very interesting.
4. Did....Did you like the story? XD
5. If you had only waited one more chapter you would have gotten ahold of more accurate variables, I break down that Anthony is at regular height 6'4 and Mira is 5'6/7.
6. Thank you so much for taking the time to write a review, I sincerely hoped you liked my story and continue to have fun reading it. I also hope you had a great time crunching the numbers!
You're hired!
Date: October 27 2017 7:18 PM Title: Chapter 4: The Red
Hey man, I just read the first 4 chapters of this sotry, and I have to say I love it. I really like the characters and the situation you put them in, with the girl having to fight her dark urges to kill the guy. Mira is super interesting, and Anthony is too. I do kinda agree with the other commenter that things seemed to move from hate to love a little bit quickly, but I think this story has a ton of potential going foward. I hope it's a long one.
Author's Response:
Hey there Kanto! thank you for reading and reviewing the story! I'm really glad you liked it! And yeah, I know when transitioning to the actual practical application of the story from the outline it was a little off, but in the grand scheme of things, trust me, it works out and you'll understand why it seemed the way it did! Just like I told MadHatter, stay tuned, all will be explained, and I hope you like where we end up going! Thank you again, friend, for taking the time to give feedback!
[Report This]Date: October 26 2017 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 4: The Red
I’m really enjoying this! Thanks for continuing this delightful tale! 😁
Author's Response:
Thank you for the kind feedback Soniti! I love writing it, so I hope you love coming along just as much!
Date: October 26 2017 3:53 PM Title: Chapter 4: The Red
Definitely going strong with your narrative and character development and I love it lol.
I've seen this scenario done in other stories, but nothing with this level of detail at all. I just really do love that about your story so far is how much detail you provide about what's going on at all times.
Seeing how Mira is combating her own inner demons.. (lul, pun?) it's interesting to see the next meeting for the two before school or whatever comes next at normal size.
Anthony's strange attraction to dominant woman is something I can relate too.. I kind of have the same preference I think. A woman who asserts her will is.. a turn on I guess? Or maybe i'm as weird as him, and why this story is so appealing to me.
THE ONLY critique I can offer in an even remotely negative aspect, is Mira's and anthony's feelings are... progressing pretty fast it seems. I dunno if that's just a surface thing or if they are like rapidly falling in love I suppose? I just enjoy the story so much that I don't wanna see the relationship blossom TOO fast I guess lol.. You are doing such a good job so far, I just want more XD
Good luck with the next one!
Author's Response:
Hey there MadHatter! Thanks so much for reading, I really appreciate how much you enjoy the story thus far, it really gives me the confidence to write, and not just this piece either. Personally, from me to you, thank you, friend, for supporting me since the beginning. I totally get your concern too, when writing the earliest parts I thought maybe the outline didn't convey the interaction at the same pace as I had envisioned my transition to the story, but trust me, they feel attraction to each other, but there's a lot to overcome before something...Major... Happens. Keep reading, and I'm sure you won't be disappointed. Its also got a fairly long way to go, my last story was about 120,000 words, and I have only taken a break from that to write this as my main project.