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Reviewer: Chozo Signed [Report This]
Date: October 10 2017 8:34 AM Title: Remember this Day

"His hair was browned because of mud and dandruff"

 

Dandruff is white flakes, so far as I know. Not sure how someone's hair would be browned on account of that.



Author's Response: I dunno, maybe the fact that there is MUD in his hair might have turned it brown. Not to mention if you have dandruff it means you arenít taking proper care of your hair. When you arenít taking proper care of your hair, it loses itís more vibrant, brighter look. Henceforth, It dulls, or becomes a more brown look. Like a platinum blonde who suddenly stops washing their hair and it becomes very thin and brown over time.

Reviewer: geeman Signed [Report This]
Date: October 09 2017 7:06 PM Title: Remember this Day

Decent oneshot. Written well enough that I could picture what was going on although it was so short and nothing much happened. I look forward to your next work!

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