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Reviewer: Maximus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 31 2017 1:31 PM Title: Chapter 20: a new challenger approaches.

The great escape! Im not normally a fan of the "escape" story line but that was clever. 


Emily actually seemed somewhat regretful, even concerned. See if she softens at all or if her rage gets the best of her if she discovers his escape plans. 


Like the new character introduction too. Good job!

 



Author's Response:

In my head, Emily's reaction was more fear of being judged by someone on the outside rather than actual regret.  She cares what people think, only if she deems them worthy. That is why she trusted Rachel and Jason together in the first place.  She expected their fear of her to keep them in line and to a degree, it had an effect on the plan. 

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